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vaznetti

FF/SPN: Xinwuwei Docks

Aug 21, 2006 17:03

Blessings against the Thunder
Xinwuwei Docks, 1
by Vanzetti
FF/SPN
John/Zoe

Thanks to musesfool and rez_lo for beta-reading, and to the_grynne for help with Chinese language.

Earlier parts:
Eurydice Settlement
Caieta Port
Xú Landing, 1
Xú Landing, 2

( in which we have a family reunion and the hints of a plot arc )

fanfic, crossovers, blessings_against_thunder

Comments 40

musesfool August 21 2006, 16:47:24 UTC

I very much enjoyed the interaction between the Tams and the Winchesters. And Dean's response to Zoe, of course. *G*

vaznetti August 21 2006, 21:11:54 UTC

Ha! So pleased. I'm chugging away on the next bit, which I'm much happier about, having mostly ducked the impending fist of infodump. Mostly.

gryphonrhi August 21 2006, 17:39:16 UTC

::giggling:: Loved *all* of this, dear, but particularly the ending. ;-> What do you know? Mal *can* learn!

vaznetti August 21 2006, 21:13:28 UTC

My Mal is, for some reason, a pretty cunning creature. And I couldn't resist the ending, if only because as I wrote the beginning I suddenly stopped and thought, hey, was she naked?

gryphonrhi August 21 2006, 23:51:37 UTC

::cheerful:: Go, Zoe! Weapons first, not clothes! (And I like your Mal a lot. Me, I just refuse to let Mal near Cory, but for some reason I keep imagining Methos making a very good living for all of them as their strategist...)

vaznetti August 22 2006, 08:07:30 UTC

Oh, come on. Mal and Cory would be such good value. Do it!

So glad you're still enjoying this.

Thread 5

bluesister August 21 2006, 17:42:00 UTC

Mal's got his eyebrows raised, like he's ready to say something smart. Then he seems to reconsider.

Good idea to use Sam & River's psychicness in common. Hmm...

vaznetti August 21 2006, 21:13:57 UTC

I suspect that they're psychic in slightly different ways, but yes, it does give them something in common.

bbrownsugar August 21 2006, 17:49:17 UTC

"Metaphor, Dean," Sam says.

"I know that, jerkface.

I LOLed at this, it sounds true to the Winchesters.

"Zoe was naked," she says. "He kept thinking of that." She twirls around and just like that, she's gone, Simon following with that apologetic look again.

LOL oh Dean. He needs to find a woman.

vaznetti August 21 2006, 21:15:33 UTC

LOL oh Dean. He needs to find a woman.

Heh. I can comment no further.

I'm glad that Sam and Dean sounded right, there -- I don't have quite such a good grasp of their language, I fear, so I worry about the banter.

cofax7 August 21 2006, 23:07:36 UTC

Oh, no. Dean and Kaylee, I could see. Dean and River would be... interesting. And very very weird.

This is marvelous. YAY PLOT! You know me and plot.

vaznetti August 22 2006, 08:09:58 UTC

musesfool just wrote the most beautiful Dean/River story. But I'm hoping to keep things on the subtextual level here, because too many pairings may spoil the soup.

So glad you're having fun with this!

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vaznetti August 21 2006, 21:29:51 UTC

The boys not knowing enough to be afraid of the Academy, Sam being all 'can't catch a break' with no *CLUE* of how big a break he got...

And it's not just them -- I think all three of them are going to get a shock when they see what they're really up against, because this is nothing like anything they've dealt with before.

The hard part withthe language isn't John, who just seems to sound right to my ear -- it's Dean and Sam, who have much more distinctive speech patterns -- I don't want to disrupt those, but I also don't want the conversations to jar.