Comments | veracifix: You are House.

veracifix

You are House.

Aug 04, 2005 11:16

Title: End of the Line
Subject: House/Cameron
Word count: 3225
Rating: PG-13
Preview: When you stand at one end of the line, you think that point the start. You look toward the other end, that's the one you call the end. What if you stood there instead? Would it be the start?
Notes: (firstly, above is not an excerpt) This is written in a second- ( Read more... )

fic, house/cameron

Comments 22

violette_b August 4 2005, 18:49:17 UTC

Can I really say any more than I already did? Well, I could give you one of my favorite lines:

"Yes, Dr. House. I believe in you because unlike you, I believe in people." She lets that hang in the air, with just a spark.

Ouch :D

Oh, and I didn't mention this earlier, but I like the subtle anatomical references you made. It's only realistic that any of them would think like that.

And, since I think it's so cool, I'll also say I love the contrast between the elevator stairs and the marble floor. Life is rough, uneven, never-ending, and yet, at the end (relative, of course) there's the comfort of solid ground. Which is with House, and as such, is an interesting concept. I'm getting more out of this story just talking about it XD

Love to pieces, and adding to my memories. (All writing I'm going to keep private, so don't worry if you don't see it there. Speaking of which, I need to change the security of some earlier ones...)

Anytime you're ready, send your stuff to me :)

XOXO,
~Liz

veracifix August 5 2005, 04:04:12 UTC

Lol, well it's great to see people get out as much as they can from the story ^_^

No plot inspirations at the moment, but i'll be sure to turn to you when i do cook something up ;D

Thanks for everything :)

ibilic August 4 2005, 19:04:24 UTC

Liked this very much! I loved their talking, and House's inner thoughts as well. I like how they didn't attack the issue of him not liking her head-on, but they still dealt with it.

Usually, I can't follow these types of fics, the whole second-perspective thing. Most of the time, there's too much vague, unnecessary language to sift through in order to actually figure out what's going on. But that didn't happen here, and that was great.

Write more! :)

veracifix August 5 2005, 04:09:36 UTC

*gasp* you don't usually like second-perspective stories? why not! i love them XD Writing in them is much more fun though. Especially 'you' as House. I don't know, it should seem harder, what with him not showing his real feelings, but i actually think he's easiest to write. And definately very enjoyable. You should try delving into his mind sometimes ;]

as for vague and unnecessary language, well--i thought this was full of them XD Anyways, i'm glad you liked :)

ibilic August 5 2005, 04:52:59 UTC

I don't know why I don't usually like them. I guess I'm just weird like that.

as for vague and unnecessary language, well--i thought this was full of them XD

Trust me, you haven't read some of the stuff I have. A lot of language is good, but only when there's a point to it. And what you have here isn't unnecessary, it actually conveys something. In the fics that I've read, the language was there for the sake of being there and looking pretty, something that the author felt obligated to include, just because they've seen it in a million other second-person fics out there. With yours, I didn't have to reread the whole thing a million times (though I did read it again because I liked it), to understand what was going on. I guess that's why I don't like most.

You should try delving into his mind sometimes ;]I don't know if I'm quite ready to do that yet. House is a really complicated guy and I don't know if I'm ready to jump into his head just yet. The writing skills need some work before I can make an attempt at delving into his [ ( ... )

veracifix August 5 2005, 16:01:54 UTC

I didn't have to reread the whole thing a million times (though I did read it again because I liked it), to understand what was going on.
Yeah i really do try to avoid too much confusion. Because when i come across those in other fics i think to myself, does this not make sense or am i mentally imcompetent? @_@; i don't like that (especially when it's usually the latter reason, haha)

The writing skills need some work before I can make an attempt at delving into his [somewhat insane] psyche, LOL...
XD he IS insane alright, but you are more than able :)

Thanks for the comments, i'll know what to avoid now :D

princessklutz04 August 4 2005, 19:41:01 UTC

i loved it! i'm definitely going to have to ask you for a sequel. it was very well written, and easy to follow. look forward to reading more of your writing.

veracifix August 5 2005, 04:20:38 UTC

Yeah i felt like i should have kept going there >< But the thing is, i usually don't like to read/write about them actually getting together together you know what i mean? comfortable around each other, it feels too OOC to me (as the show have not progressed that far) but i'll see...maybe i can work out some more dialogue like things =)

I'm glad you liked ^^

daphne8601 August 5 2005, 04:34:10 UTC

YAY!! *does that happy dance of possibility*

veracifix August 5 2005, 04:40:00 UTC

please don't get your hopes up, i can't deal with that ><; lol.

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daphne8601 August 5 2005, 04:05:00 UTC

Wow that was a amazing the contrast in the story seemed to just make it jump out at you! Wonderful. Ya will there be a sequel? I know id love to see one!

veracifix August 5 2005, 04:22:11 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it :) as for the sequel..please see above comment =P

daphne8601 August 5 2005, 04:31:34 UTC

OO yay! going to check now...

starhawk2005 August 5 2005, 15:11:38 UTC

all the while a composed air of grace still wafts about.

Heheh, love that line.

Also liked the whole rods and cones thing...flashback to my Perception and Sensations undergrad classes, heheh.

What's up with that anyway? Didn't your mother tell you it will be stuck that way if you keep it up?)

*snort*

"You'd want one next to me, wouldn't you? Make it convenient for you to blackmail me into more dates with you." Maybe you'd gone too far with this, you fear.

*sporfles coffee*

Nice stuff. Loved all the little tangential inner thoughts swirling through the text (House's mind). Me likey.

veracifix August 5 2005, 16:06:13 UTC

Also liked the whole rods and cones thing...flashback to my Perception and Sensations undergrad classes, heheh.
Lol i know, i had to refer back to a book because i weren't sure which was which, and then i doub--quadruple checked it to make sure it was right. You really do learn some stuff in school XD like the existentialism things.

Glad you liked :D