Chapter 18: Pimp My Ride

[sarah_p]

Title: All Fall Down
Pairing / Character: Veronica/Logan, Keith
Rating: PG-13 to R
Words: 140,237
Summary: In Neptune, the brighter the summer sun, the deeper the shadows.
Spoilers / Warnings: Seasons 1 and 2 / Language and adult situations
Chapter 18: Pimp My Ride
Author: sarah_p
Additional Characters: Lamb, John Enbom, Caz Truman, Dick, Corny
Rating: PG

Comments

[steph0202]

This is just moving along at a great pace. Love that as soon as she finishes one case she gets another. And poor Logan. :)

[sarah_p]

I know! Veronica certainly has had a productive summer. And, hee, Logan should KNOW better than to order pizza mid-makeout session. WHAT WAS HE THINKING?

I'm so glad you took the time to read and comment. Thank you! :)

[rowanceleste]

I love this story. Lamb didn't surprise me that much by not acting on the information when most of the victims are poor or oppressed wives of the wealthy and the perpertrators are 09ers. As for Enbom, yeah...sense of false entitlement much?? I do feel bad for my woobie getting cock blocked by Corny though! I'm sure Veronica will make it up to him sometime later :)

[sarah_p]

Yay! I'm glad that, *eighteen* chapters in (EEEH!), you're still enjoying the story. And, see, you've nailed Lamb down, because in Neptune it's aaaaaall about who you are, and how much money you have. I wrote it, and I'm all frustrated at him ;)!

As for Enbom, yeah...sense of false entitlement much??

EXACTLY. That was the whole running theme of the chapter (I mean, look at his MOTHER--we know where he's learning it from.), and I'm glad it came out. Whee!

HA, poor Logan and the cock blocking debacle. Let's HOPE Veronica takes pity on him at some point ;).

Thank you so much for reading! Whoooo! :)

[berry_hearts]

so many questions about vm_summer!
*Will they ever find out what happened to the girls?
*What is it with formal wear?
*Will Logan ever get laid?
*Does Corny have feelings for Veronica?
*is Corny stoned?

ALL THIS AND MORE IN THE NEXT INSTALLMENT OF ALL FALL DOWN!
haha. it was good i liked it. the dancing could have been extended, but i obsessed with L/V-ness...so i may be biased.

did they find trina's pony? haha.

[sarah_p]

Well, first of all, Trina's diamond-studded unicorn is still at large ;)...

Since you posed such HARD-HITTING questions, the brief answer section!
*Will they ever find out what happened to the girls?
Probably... ;)

*What is it with formal wear?
It is WICKED HOT. Maaaan!

*Will Logan ever get laid?
He sincerly hopes so!

*Does Corny have feelings for Veronica?
HMMMMMMM! ;)

*is Corny stoned?
Usually!

I'm glad you liked it! Hee, I know that I cut the dancing way short. I figured the gropage/make-out session might help cushion that blow. You know, until Corny came in, anyway... ;)

Thanks so much for reading and commenting! :)

[herowlness]

Okay, see, now THIS is the problem with you posting late at night and me being TIRED. Because, well, then EVERYONE ELSE says what I was going to say before I could say it. So now my OMG!YAY's don't sound original. =wibbles=

Anyhow! I loved the use of a BMW as THE car, and I adore the fact that Enbom was pissed over the color. So irrational and so characteristic of the 09ers. Hee.

But, also, I loooooooved your whole MLP/Snake Eyes memory thing. And how Logan decided at the end that he couldn't donate Snake Eyes after all - just in case Veronica's ponies ever needed protecting. Awwwwww. How awesome would Snake Eyes smut be, in this fic? I know it's probably not likely (omg! not outlined!), but ... a girl can dream. :D

Also:
“He dumped an entire bottle of ketchup on Luke’s head.”

“Idiot.”

“You told him to!”

“He wasn’t supposed to get caught! Besides,” she crossed her arms in front of her chest. “It was only a suggestion. I was serving solely in an advisory capacity. Figures you’d still blame me.”That was hilarious.

[sarah_p]

Well, the fact that yo BETAED this and therefore were the first person EVER to read it still means that you WIN. Yaaaay! :)

And how Logan decided at the end that he couldn't donate Snake Eyes after all - just in case Veronica's ponies ever needed protecting. Awwwwww. How awesome would Snake Eyes smut be, in this fic?

I KNOW. It's like you read my mind! Dude, someone should totally go and write fic where L/V have smut, and a MLP and Snake Eyes are around for the fun. WHAT, SOMEONE ALREADY DID THAT??? FREAK ;).

That was hilarious. Veronica calls him an IDIOT for doing what SHE TOLD HIM TO DO. Heeeeeeeeeeee.

HEE. It's a woman's perogative to change her mind, Lizzy! DUH! :)

I WANT A PONY, TOO. FOR THE RECORD.

Finally - the reference to sex in the backseat of the BMW inspired the use of this icon. You are such a LIAR. YOU USE THAT ICON AT EVERY AVAILABLE OPPORTUNITY. Impala slut ;). Also, question: WHEN DOES IMPALA SEX *NOT* SOUND GOOD? THAT ICON IS MISLEADING

[rindee]

OMG - GI Joe & Snake Eyes at a fancy charity auction. Who knew? They do get around, don't they? The mystery of the week was delightful - it's always good to see an 09er get taken down a peg. And it's nice to see Logan and Veronica making out again. It just warms my heart. (Hee.) I love this line: “No, Logan. Hold on.” Veronica wiggled on top of Logan in attempt to stand up, and he closed his eyes and bit his lip. “I think that’s the pizza. Zip me up.”“No, Logan. Hold on.” Veronica wiggled on top of Logan in attempt to stand up, and he closed his eyes and bit his lip. “I think that’s the pizza. Zip me up.” Too cute. Oh, yeah - Dick, in a tux. Score! And spacey (stoner?) Caz - "Whoa"! *giggles*

As always, your writing is so light and effortless; it makes me smile, and when I'm done reading, I always want more.

[sarah_p]

OMG - GI Joe & Snake Eyes at a fancy charity auction. Who knew? They do get around, don't they?

See, and even though I totally know what you mean by this, my head has conjured up visions of them in little suits and ties, hanging out with the wealthy, and...yeah. Never mind. HEE ;).

I'm realllly glad that the MotW worked for you, because as much as this chapter was an excuse to get the toys in (Hee!), making the stuff around it work was important to me.

AND! ANYONE in this fic in a tux is hereby decreed a GOOD. THING. Mmmm :).

As always, your writing is so light and effortless; it makes me smile, and when I'm done reading, I always want more.

Awww, Rind, that totally and entirely just made my day. I'm always worried about being 'too-dialogue heavy, everything else light,' so hearing this...well, it kind of relieves me. A LOT. So thank you for that, and for the fantastic feedback :). Hee, you're much more on top of it than I am. *is woefully about SEVEN CHAPTERS BEHIND on leaving it :P*

[rindee]

Wait! You mean they weren't wearing ties and little tuxedos?! Hee.