I saw you standing up there crying, and then you jumped off a cliff. Sounds like suicide to me
That line had me laughing SO HARD! And even though there wasn't sex, this was a really great chapter, Linzi. I especially liked the ending and how you wrote Harry. Oh, the suspense!
You all ready know that I consider you a Goddess and this just confirms that my belief is justified! *dusts off ground then kneels down to properly worship her younger twin* You wrote this part beautifully. Their reactions, Draco's thoughts and worries and suspicions and jealousy...so perfect. I liked the little mistakes they're making because it makes sense that trust wouldn't be firmly established after such a sudden beginning to their relationship without a foundation of friendship etc. I liked Moana and hope she slaps some sense into Draco! Eagerly waiting for part 5. This is just a brilliant idea!
I didn't feel like writing smut would be realistic for this chapter. I kept having to remind myself that they're 17 and that their reactions should be as plausible as possible.
I'm really glad you picked up on the small stuff. It was a hard chapter to write and I don't know how I could have done it without Moana (whose name means 'ocean').
This story is getting exciting. It's very funny when Draco went to 'rescue' Hermione and the dialogue just cracked me up. I like the idea about the character of Moana, sort of complicate the story a bit but I am sure it's for good. Wonderful work, I love it, Lnzi!!
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That line had me laughing SO HARD! And even though there wasn't sex, this was a really great chapter, Linzi. I especially liked the ending and how you wrote Harry. Oh, the suspense!
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You all ready know that I consider you a Goddess and this just confirms that my belief is justified! *dusts off ground then kneels down to properly worship her younger twin* You wrote this part beautifully. Their reactions, Draco's thoughts and worries and suspicions and jealousy...so perfect. I liked the little mistakes they're making because it makes sense that trust wouldn't be firmly established after such a sudden beginning to their relationship without a foundation of friendship etc. I liked Moana and hope she slaps some sense into Draco! Eagerly waiting for part 5. This is just a brilliant idea!
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I didn't feel like writing smut would be realistic for this chapter. I kept having to remind myself that they're 17 and that their reactions should be as plausible as possible.
I'm really glad you picked up on the small stuff. It was a hard chapter to write and I don't know how I could have done it without Moana (whose name means 'ocean').
I'm thrilled that you liked it! :D :D
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