Ok... So, I write poems..

[vampyregrrl]

I write poems, it's one of my many insane hobbies... (of which I have many), and I was wondering if you all could give me some feedback on my latest.

Comments

[cherrycity]

Suggestion?
Third stanza, you used "inner" twice, maybe another word would fit better, without seeming repetitive, like "my private silence"

The first two lines, also, threw me off, since they rhymed, and then that was it, no more rhyming, lol.

Nice though, definitely would be great expanded upon. :D