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Jan 20, 2008 11:05

THE OUTLAND

Genre: AU
Rating: NC-17 for the whole story
Feedback: Any and all is welcome
Disclaimer: These are Annie Proulx's brilliant original characters and her story, and I have treated it and them (and her) with as much respect as I can muster.
This story is for Canstandit

AUTHOR'S NOTES: I'm not especially happy with this chapter. It covers ground ( Read more... )

Comments 82

shieldmaid1 January 20 2008, 01:32:31 UTC

I cannot even tell you how happy I was to see this story update. Your writing is unbelievably beautiful--and more than that, it is true. I believe in this version of these characters so completely. I will read every word you write; thanks so much for sharing it with us.

wildcolumbine January 20 2008, 01:36:24 UTC

Thank you for that. My aim is to make them as believable as possible, much as I'd love to have them do other things sometimes ;)

tmn1966 January 20 2008, 01:35:41 UTC

Oh, my gosh, this chapter was great! You shouldn't be anything but happy about it. I thoroughly enjoyed it as Ennis and Jack settled into life together. I thought you did a good job in conveying Jack's frustration. I was so glad to see Ennis realizing that he was home. I think one of the best parts is when Jack's mom got her say. That last paragraph is great! Loved it.

Thanks so much for the wonderful update.

Teri

wildcolumbine January 20 2008, 01:38:29 UTC

Phew! Thanks! It just seemed like such a mess when I was writing it. I'm glad you liked it.

mariez65 January 20 2008, 01:42:18 UTC

I guess it's true that we are our own worst critics because I'm baffled as to what there could be in that amazing chapter that you wouldn't be happy with. You strip Ennis and Jack down their basics - these are tough men who have lived hard lives with more disappointments than not, but being together - really being together can't help but bring about the euphoria of true love:

...So this was what all the songs were about, this was how it felt to look into someone's eyes and know you wanted him as much as he wanted you.

I appreciate the pragmatic details of how hard it is and will be for them, and the realistic view of Jack's recovery. Mrs. Twist's first-person accounting is precisely as I imagine her thoughts would be - conflicted, but a mother first and foremost - woe to the person who tries to stand in the way of her boy's happiness. Remarkable writing. Thank you!

wildcolumbine January 20 2008, 01:56:45 UTC

I can't tell you how much I appreciated your comment. You nailed all the things I was hoping to get across. Thank you so much!

I canNOT imagine . . . cynical21 January 20 2008, 02:01:40 UTC

. . . why you'd be less than satisfied with this superb writing. You are single-handedly feeding my huge appetite for AU/canon work - the kind that comes from a zig in this place rather than a zag in that place, so that the story didn't end with Jack dying. This is just incredibly plausible and perfectly in keeping with the setting and characteriziations of the original story and film.

I don't know how you can even think you could make it better; I honestly wouldn't change a thing.

CYN

Re: I canNOT imagine . . . wildcolumbine January 20 2008, 23:03:34 UTC

Thank you, Cyn. I'm always fascinated by the tiny moments that change lives. I just wondered if they COULD have made a go of it if even one card had fallen right for them. And thanks for the comment on Mrs T too. She's an odd character, hard to read.

PS cynical21 January 20 2008, 02:06:47 UTC

Also liked the perspective from Jack's mother. It's not a voice we often hear, but I think you hit exactly the right note with it, and I love how protective she is of her son and his true love.

CYN