I am gobsmacked by how beautiful this was. I don't even really know what to say other than, I loved it. I don't usually care for 2nd Person POV, but it worked amazingly well in this scenario. I adore the switch for POV between parts. It always nice to get into the headspace of both characters. The entire story was wonderfully written, but these particular lines really struck me:
There is that feeling, the same one that peeks up in the pit of your belly through the undertow of ancient memory, that brings you right back to the moment you crawled up his chest and he met you there. (from part 1)
That one actually made me gasp a little. And this:
And with every push and kiss and mumble of Sam’s voice rumbling through your chest, the sharper the taste of happiness becomes.
Awwww! So sweet! Truly fantastic. You are such an amazing discovery. I'm so glad that I read this.
The comment was well-deserved. I'm definitely keeping an eye for more of your fiction. I noticed that this is your first post to this journal, but I'm hoping that it won't be the last.
This is gorgeous and seriously too many beautiful lines to quote, like this this hot buzz of things that hummed beneath the undertow of your adolescence is a fresh breeze in your tired bones. really beautiful prose, vivid and emotive. :)
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There is that feeling, the same one that peeks up in the pit of your belly through the undertow of ancient memory, that brings you right back to the moment you crawled up his chest and he met you there. (from part 1)
That one actually made me gasp a little. And this:
And with every push and kiss and mumble of Sam’s voice rumbling through your chest, the sharper the taste of happiness becomes.
Awwww! So sweet! Truly fantastic. You are such an amazing discovery. I'm so glad that I read this.
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