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[nafrolean]

The wind was whispering around all corners of my house, but the wind works on a different scale, so this so called whispering was actually what I might define as obnoxious, of course there's nothing I could really do about this. To me the wind was like God snoring keeping me away alright, and it's too fucking cold and too me that's like God taking

Comments

[raeth]

Totally not a rip on your writing... but it needs some periods. And some paragraphs. Without them I, for one, cannot function or concentrate on anything else.
Just a suggestion from me.
^_^

Didn't realize people still read this

[nafrolean]

Yeah this story was a free write I was doing and I posted it here to show it to someone. I did no editing so don't consider this my standard fare, don't get me wrong I'm pretty bad about run on sentencess, but if I had edited this most of the problems would be gone... Thank you anyway though.