New Fic: First Time for Everything (5/10): B/J: NC-17

[xhaleslowly]

Happy Spring! The sun is shining and the weather is warming up and the days are getting longer. Perfect excuse for more porny stories :)

Much love to paddies for the new icon (especially since I know you've been very very busy!!!). And many thanks to everyone that's offered their feedback and encouragement. Hope you guys are continuing to enjoy the

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OMG! YAY!. *runs off to read*

[not_yet_defined]

god i love your fic. that was unbelievably hot. as always your attention to detail creates delicious visuals in the mind. so glad you are still continuing to write for paddies' fomd.

helping with the homework was a perfect schmoopy first.

once again a great pair of firsts, and reading this totally makes me want to go back and watch s1 again (or maybe first go back and re-read the other 4 firsts you have written again.)

[xhaleslowly]

as always your attention to detail creates delicious visuals in the mind.

Thank you so much for that great feedback... with these first time fics, I want to focus on the detail and pull the reader in as much as I can. I'm glad to hear that it works for you :)

And I know what you mean about S1 - writing these has got me a bit nostalgic for it too ;)

[such_a_steph]

Great dose of GUH! for the spring :D I'm glad you are enjoying some sunshine, and if that inspires more fic... bring on the summer I say (it will help to warm my cold winter *fans self*).

You painted a wonderful picture of Justin's excitement and anticipation when Brian called out to him. I could feel the shift from the begrudging acceptance of Brian's tricking, and it drew me straight in.

For me, this was the standout line, the one that caught me and took my breath away.
You close your eyes and don't open them for long minutes later, once the silence is restored to the loft, and the comforting familiar sense of being alone with Brian has returned. After all the heat and intensity is over, it's being alone with Brian that grounds him :)

Oh... and Brian eating from Justin's bowl... so adorable *grins* (and Brian being so nonchalant "What?"). Lovely moment.

Thanks again for another wonderful installment. See you next time *hugs* Steph

[xhaleslowly]

Thanks so much for all this detailed feedback - it's so great to get and truly helps me write the rest of the series.

You painted a wonderful picture of Justin's excitement and anticipation when Brian called out to him.

I'm glad that worked for you... I struggled with starting this fic because I wasn't sure how to "set the scene" at first, at least without it seeming too much like the first time fic #3 - but I also wanted to make sure the reader knew that Justin was "ready for anything".

And thanks for pulling out your favourite line - I love it when readers do that :)

As always, your comments are so very appreciated! I hope it won't be so long before I show my face again - first time #6 is already started, so it could be sooner than this last time ;)

[darkhorse488]

Good lord that was hot and the ending was absolutely perfect. This series is making me so nostalgic for season 1! You're a very gifted writer and I can't wait for more updates.

[xhaleslowly]

Thanks so much for this, Sarah - I had a heck of a time with the ending, so it's great to know you liked what I came up with!

And yeah, writing this has made me very nostalgic for S1 too :)

[beauty_forashes]

A hand on your head and you know it's Brian guiding you and you feel connected to him through the trick, know that what you do to the trick will resonate through to Brian.

Brilliant!! I usually need twice as long to read your fics because I'm constantly backtracking and re-reading sentences like that two or three times, just to marvel at the wording and structure - lol. *iz dork*
Loved it - thanks for updating! :))

[xhaleslowly]

Thank you thank you thank you for this... I love playing with words and tying to do different things with structure, so it's so very awesome to get this kind of feedback :)

Much appreciated!

[moose74]

I actually gasped audibly when I saw there was Ethan!fic on my f-list!!!

It was so hot, as always, but I love how you always get inside of (no pun) whoever's point of view you're writing from. Justin's whole state of mind the entire time and especially this line:

your heart triple thumps and you feel completely, utterly turned inside out

I just imagine that's exactly how it would feel being in this situation. (I haven't been 18 for awhile, or in this situation ever, being a girl and all, but I understand the being overwhelmed part.)

Gosh I'm rambling! Hot and sweet at the end, which is another of my favorite things about your writing; your obvious love for these characters. Thanks for putting a smile on my face this evening! :)

[xhaleslowly]

Thank you so much for all this, Moose... it's so good to know that you guys are still out there and interested in reading my little fics :)

And thanks for pulling out that line... I just wanted to try and capture that *omfg* overwhelming feeling without going overboard with too many words, you know? I'm glad it worked for you!

...which is another of my favorite things about your writing; your obvious love for these characters

Aw, yeah, I do love these characters. I love that they've inspired me to write, and I love that there is so much of their story to tell :)

Thanks again, sweetie - glad my fic made you smile :X