Plans

[xie_xie_xie]

Plans
By Xie

My first fiction ... be gentle. This is part one, there will be three parts. They will come quickly. This story is told in alternating points of view, and one of them is somewhat unusual. I ask you to trust me. I promise it will be ok.

This is an angst-free zone. It is post-513 therapy for us all.

With many thanks to my hot Italian beta

Comments

[zosha2003]

It's good, really good. I like it and am (not too) patiently waiting for more!

I especially like that you used Melanie's POV - someone rarely heard from in that capacity.

And (this is coming from a wanna-be writer without much actual talent) I think you're brave as hell for posting any fic. You might just be my new hero.

[xie_xie_xie]

*blushes*

I was sort of surprised at how nervous I was to post this. I'm maybe feeling like I was a little brave. Posting snark or opinions or commentary is putting my brain out there for public viewing... this was something different than that, much more personal.

So thank you so much!!!

[epicallytired]

OMFG... that's good stuff... and nary a well in sight to throw justin down YAY YOU!!!

seriously, loved.

i gave you the benifit of the doubt with the Mel POV and i think it works here...with this. (but then i'm a sucker for an outsiders POV and mel kind of qualifies) plus you made me almost like her...so that's a compliment.

I had to hand it to the kid. “I don’t think we’ve met. Who the fuck are you?”

Justin laughed. “Author of the Kinney Operating Manual.”

“I though that was Michael.”

“No, he wrote, you know, Brian Kinney for Dummies. The actual technical specs, those are mine.”

that right there... brilliant.

brian is SOO fucked.

So nicely done.

[xie_xie_xie]

So now I get to squeee... I was nervous you'd hate the Mel POV. And yeah, no wells for Justin. Funny how much I like him down the well in fiction I read, but in the show, and now I guess in the Justin who appears in my fiction, I like strong!brave!clever!Justin.

I was really hoping you'd like this. I'm all aglow now.

[epicallytired]

i was genuinely captivated.

it was original and your justin voice is STRONG... smart, clever brave, you got him down.

it's nice when someone who knows and likes the charaters can also write well...

i hate reading WIP's but i'm reading yours.

and see, there's a reason i don't trhow justin down too many wells...sometimes it's fun to write him as more than a plot device :P

[faramir_boromir]

This is a *first* effort?? I'm amazed. It's good. So many good lines I can hardly pick out my favorites, but "Brian Kinney for Dummies" may head the list.

Every day, no matter what was going on, I sent Brian a blank email, and got one back in reply.

A brillilant idea, original. Keep going!

[xie_xie_xie]

A brillilant idea, original

I gotta admit, I kind of fell in love with this idea. I think it would actually work. I think it would amuse Brian, and he'd admire it. It's so... marketingy.

[court1429]

Wonderful story, Xie! Loved having Mel's POV. In my moments of not hating her, I always thought she & Brian were more alike than they wanted to admit and that's why they got along so poorly most of the time.

This made me laugh: Nothing like a six-year-old on a sugar high to remind you that kitchens are for nourishing, healthy family meals, not hot sex. As in, I’ll give Gus the low carb, calm child special tomorrow, if you stay in the bedroom tonight. Is that so hard?

This just made me ache: and a hundred memories of this exact moment poured into my brain all at once. I suddenly hated the bathroom, the loft, even the towels. It seemed like I’d been leaving and coming back to this place all my life, without ever just being able to stay and be home

So true. :-(((

Can't wait for the next parts. ♥ ♥ ♥

Oh, one nit: Justin laughed. “Author of the Kinney Operating Manual.”

“I though that was Michael.” Should be: *thought*

[xie_xie_xie]

Thank you thank you for the feedback! And for the typo correction... I'd say I'll have to flog my beta, but tragically, she's not a native speaker of English (although she helped dig me out of tense-switching hell in this anyway - did I mention I don't usually write fiction?) and I'm an editor, so I'm afraid I'll have to flog myself.

[justinlovesart]

I'll have to flog my beta

I failed you!!! :(

Flogging is not a threat though, you know my kinks...

You did good, Xie. Now go to sleep and and get a good night rest, because your fans want the next chapter ASAP :)

[court1429]

Flog away, but only if you want to! lol Those kinds of typos are so easy to miss and spellcheck never catches them since it's actually a word. I didn't catch it until my second read. It's so easy to put the ending "t" on there in your mind, you know?

But I know what you mean. Nothing irritates me more than to send something out and *then* find an error.

[happier_bunny]

Sorry, I hit post before I was done..that's what I get for trying to do 2 things at once

[xie_xie_xie]

Well, you and alice are like goddesses to me, so hearing you like it, and especially that you liked teh smut, lights me up like a Christmas tree. THANK YOU!

I posted this and tried to go to bed, but I had to get up and check for feedback. I now understand all the writers who say things like "Feedback is my crack" on their fictions.

Like I needed more things to be my crack. Sigh.