Plans

[xie_xie_xie]

Plans
By Xie

My first fiction ... be gentle. This is part one, there will be three parts. They will come quickly. This story is told in alternating points of view, and one of them is somewhat unusual. I ask you to trust me. I promise it will be ok.

This is an angst-free zone. It is post-513 therapy for us all.

With many thanks to my hot Italian beta

Comments

[_alicesprings]

Ok wow.

I'm very, very impressed. I knew it would be good cos you're such a snarky, clever writer, but I didn't know just how good.

OK I must admit, I kinda hate Mel so I wasn't thrilled with a Mel POV, but I'll deal with it. It's so very, very well done.

I LOVE your Justin. A lot. I don't love a lot of Justin's, but yours is awesome. I love the blank emails. Genius. Justin gets Brian. He really does. I'm always thriled when a post-513 Justin gets Brian, cos canon left me feeling like so much could go wrong with them in the future. I'm very optimistic here.

That sex scene at the end. OMG. I'm kinda choked up here. I even have a bit of a tear in the eye.

“Shhhh. Go to sleep. No talking.”

“Who are you and what have you done with the real Justin?”

I just kissed his forehead. Hoping he’d take a hint. Having this discussion? Not part of my plan.

OMG what's the plan? No talking. No no, they are talking right?

We could always talk on the phone when we were apart, why waste time talking when we were together? It was really a very

[xie_xie_xie]

There's really probably no compliment I would like more for this work, than that you like my Justin. Oh, and that I made you have a tear in your eye. I'm so proud and happy.

Now maybe I can sleep.

[_alicesprings]

You're so cute. Yes, you made me cry. Do it again, I love it.

Your Justin rocks! I'm looking forward to more of your Brian too. You did good Xie, really, really good. Get some sleep ♥

[_alicesprings]

gfafdafdsgfa!! OK I meant to mention this bit the first time, but I forgot. And I just read it again and went, hee!

I turned around and he was sitting at the computer, looking at me with absolutely no expression on his face. Well, that was a good sign, that’s the look he gets when he’s delirious with joy. Of course, it’s also the look he gets when he’s about to explode with rage, but I was going to go with the good news until forced not to. Life with Brian doesn’t make you an optimist so much as it forces you to become extremely used to working without a net.

And I also loved this bit;

“Well, not totally.” Justin twisted his head back a little and arched his eyebrows at Brian. “I asked Santa to bring you. And here you are.” Brian’s voice got a little bit husky when he said that, and he ducked his head in a sort of Gus-like way. It made me almost like him. And then Justin turned bright red and they both smiled and some kind of biochemical-neurotransmitter-nuclear reaction got going between them, even though neither one of them

[llandaffaz]

OMG, I love this!!

It made me laugh, made me cry (but not too much!) and it's very clever. Your character voices are excellent. I love Melanie's POV....so novel. And of course, Justin's just fantastic; I commented to Bunny on Retread yesterday that a lot of writers get Brian down pretty well, but a lot less seem to "get" Justin. Your Justin is perfect.

If it wasn't nearly 3am I would quote you all my favorite parts and I feel a bit bad about leaving such general feedback, but I will definitely be back to read again tomorrow and can't wait for the next part.

Thanks!

Oh, is it OK if I friend you? I found this through _alicesprings and I can't risk not seeing the next chapter as soon as you post! ;)

[_alicesprings]

Excuse me Miss, who made your v pretty icon? Cos I wanna steal it and I looked in your userpics but could not find it :(

[llandaffaz]

Hee....he is there.....you must have been distracted. :P

It's by etoile_du_soir.

Steal away.....he's so beautiful I'd like to see him around more often. :)

[_alicesprings]

I did not see him :(

Thank you!

[seanmegansean]

He shut off the water with one hand, and pulled me out of the shower and dried me with a towel, then dried himself. I draped my arms over his shoulders and just leaned on him. I felt boneless. He put the towel over my head and rubbed, and a hundred memories of this exact moment poured into my brain all at once. I suddenly hated the bathroom, the loft, even the towels. It seemed like I’d been leaving and coming back to this place all my life, without ever just being able to stay and be home. Fuck. Tears. Brian was so going to hate this.

OMG, who are and how come you write like this?!?!

I LOVE your Justin. And Mel is only half as bad as I remember her, and Linds is worse (cause she doesn't listen and doesn't want her image of Brian to change) than I remember her, but omg it's all so good.

You made me cry.

And Justin really knows his man and is going for what he wants. And he's not leaving. Not really. His plan is sheer genius.

I LOVE it. Thank you so much for posting. Perfect 513 therapy *smooches you silly*

[xie_xie_xie]

I LOVE your Justin. And Mel is only half as bad as I remember her, and Linds is worse (cause she doesn't listen and doesn't want her image of Brian to change) than I remember her, but omg it's all so good.

I am not a Lindsay fan, for a million reasons, but I wanted to find a way to reach down into the roiling mass of CowLippian muck and pull up enough canonical threads to redeem her. She's Gus' mom. I have to do it.

You made me cry.

That is music to my ears. Er, eyes.

And Justin really knows his man and is going for what he wants. And he's not leaving. Not really. His plan is sheer genius.

I often see people talk about being Brianites or Justinites, I'm not entirely sure of the proper definitions of those things. I love them both, I love them together, and I love to see Justin's blond little brain work. Smart, blond (in my case, blonde), and devious/sweet is my weakness. So yeah, Justin. And that's why Brian is SO fucked.

[such_a_steph]

This is great. And I love the Melanie POV. I'll be waiting in the wings for act 2.

[xie_xie_xie]

I'm glad you liked the Mel point of view. I worried about that, but I was helpless. That's how it had to be.

[dreambee3]

I came via a rec by Alice - and I must go back and thank her for it!

It was a lovely surprise to get a great new post-513 fic by a great new author. Excellent writing, a wonderful flow and pace, and it got me hooked immediately. You captured Brian and Justin's voices and traits so well, and covered so much feeling of their year apart. For the first time since forever, I enjoyed listening to Mel - so you have achieved something extraordinary there!

I love - so many things. I love the idea of The Plan, the blank emails were genius as only Justin can do genius, and Brian sending one during Justin's three days of silence was pretty special too. I love that their relationship has been continuing strongly with surprise visits by Justin - that Brian was home, alone, every single time - and that they had the time to themselves, no-one knew. I love your dialogue, you do it so well, and the sex wasn't too bad either! You write it hot, and loving - the look you described in Brian’s eyes was beautiful:

"I laughed a little, and turned

[xie_xie_xie]

I'm so happy that you liked it, and you picked some of my favorite things about it, too. I'm happy that everyone either likes or accepts the Melanie POV, it was just something that got into my head and wouldn't get out.

I love Justin's plan too. I think it would work.

And thank you for friending me, since I've discovered I'm a feedback slut, I'm glad I'm getting all these new friends.

More is coming very soon. If I can stop reading my feedback and squeeing and thanking everyone. *is insane*