Plans

[xie_xie_xie]

Plans
By Xie

My first fiction ... be gentle. This is part one, there will be three parts. They will come quickly. This story is told in alternating points of view, and one of them is somewhat unusual. I ask you to trust me. I promise it will be ok.

This is an angst-free zone. It is post-513 therapy for us all.

With many thanks to my hot Italian beta

Comments

[lit_writergirl]

I followed a rec here - lovely story so far. I hope you don't mind if I friend you, I love good fic to show up on my flist. :-)

[xie_xie_xie]

Thank you! And I don't mind at all!!

[lit_writergirl]

Oh good - done!

[fiercediva]

This is absolutely marvelous! Everyone else has already cited my favorite lines, but i also love the part sbout the grape juice on Brian's furniture. You so get the B/J dynamic and your character voices are excellent. Thanks for making Justin the "smart little fucker" from canon and not some chick with a dick in distress. :)

[xie_xie_xie]

Thanks for making Justin the "smart little fucker" from canon and not some chick with a dick in distress.

OH! You SO got it! I'm dying here.

Thank you.

And I loved the grape juice too. I love Brian's white furniture but I loved it anyway. It's evil but so right.

[intensefemme]

Great Job Xie Xie!

I really loved it. It was something about the rhythm and the organization of the story that seemed so fresh and new.

Although I am obsessed with B/J, I always love when the rest of canon characters are in the story. I never really minded Mel so much, and I love how the story is told through conversations with other people.

I love the blond conspiracy, and that Brian is sooo fucked.

It was so clever too- that the guy in the table ended up being Justin, the blank emails couldnt be more perfect, The Kinney Operating Manual- and clever Justin knowing exactly how to use it.

The biochemical neuro-transmitter nuclear reaction... so true. You captured the chemistry.

I could go on- but I must sleep.

I do want to make one more comment on how creative the lovemaking at the end was. The way it was written was really something new. It really made me feel something ,and see a little more deeply into their moments. ahhh.

Cant wait to read more.

*worships you*

[xie_xie_xie]

The smile on my face is embarrassing. I'm glad no one is here to see me being such a goon.

It was something about the rhythm and the organization of the story that seemed so fresh and new.

Thank you. Thank you for noticing, liking, and commenting. The organization almost escaped me more than once but my beta, gmta_nz, deserves all kinds of love for making me get control of it again. *sends love to New Zealand*

Although I am obsessed with B/J, I always love when the rest of canon characters are in the story.

Me too. It's harder to do than I expected, and in the next chapter I have more of them and I'm treading carefully with their voices. It's challenging.

I do want to make one more comment on how creative the lovemaking at the end was. The way it was written was really something new. It really made me feel something ,and see a little more deeply into their moments. ahhh.

Now you're just trying to kill me.

It's working.

[intensefemme]

I like you xie xie.

BTW, I have thought back to the blank email multiple times today.
How is it that less words are sometimes more?

One more thing- are you Chinese (asking because of your screen name)?

[xie_xie_xie]

One more thing- are you Chinese (asking because of your screen name)?

No, you pronounce the "X" in my name the same way you pronounce the "X" in "Christmas." *G*

In other words, my name is Christie. Xie is just a nickname some people started calling me long ago. I used to have a hobby of arguing with anti-gay fundamentalists on AOL message boards, and me and the others on "my team" would often write "Xian" for "Christianity," because it was shorter and yeah, because it bugged them. Someone critized me for it, I said "Why is it any different than writing 'Merry Xmas,' do you get upset over that?" And then all the other gay people and liberals started replacing "Chris" or "Christ" in all words with an "X," and since my name was "Christie," I got it done like forty million times, and so I turned into "Xie."

So, not Chinese, just, you know, insane.

[lucinda428]

What a great start! I don't know whether you read my comment the other day that the sizzle between B and J is all in the way they look at once another, but your story certainly reflects that extremely well. I like the Mel POV. Will we get a Brian POV at some stage?

[xie_xie_xie]

Thank you so much! I agree about the way they look at each other. It goes right through me.

This story is entirely Justin/Mel POV, for a specific reason. I have a second story roughed out, that will include a Brian POV. It's a sequel of a kind to this, although it will have a bit of overlap in the time frame. But it's not just a "now from Brian's point of view."

Thank you for asking about that, though.

[_alicesprings]

Yes, thank you Lucinda.

Sequel! sfsfdsdssaghfhfgfd!!

[paddies]

OMG I CANNOT EXPRESS HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS STORY.

YES, I LOVE IT THAT MUCH! (can't turn the caps lock down).

Seriously, tho...your characterization is so perfect I could marry it, Mel's pov is pure brilliance (I never thought I'd say something like that) and the whole "Justin has a plan" idea is sheer genius.

I love it. ♥

Also, I have to friend you, but since I cannot friend any more people from my journal *kicks stupid LJ limits* I'll friend you from my "other" journal paddies_the_2nd, hope it's ok... :-)

[xie_xie_xie]

Seriously, tho...your characterization is so perfect I could marry it, Mel's pov is pure brilliance (I never thought I'd say something like that) and the whole "Justin has a plan" idea is sheer genius.

It's almost painful to have so many objects of my own fangirl adoration liking this story. I am almost speechless now.

PLEASE friend me... from anywhere you'd like, LOL.

*bounces and squees*

[paddies]

It's almost painful to have so many objects of my own fangirl adoration liking this story. I am almost speechless now.

The adoration is totally mutual, believe me. It's been a long time since I read a story with such a perfect Justin characterization... it makes me almost giddy... :-)

PLEASE friend me... from anywhere you'd like, LOL.

Eheee... I friended you from paddies_the_2nd, I don't want to miss any more goodies of yours... ;-)

♥