Comments | xwaltzforvenus: experimental weirdness, part 13

xwaltzforvenus

experimental weirdness, part 13

Feb 11, 2009 22:26

Title: An End Has a Start
Rating: R
A/N: this was written really quickly, and it's been a while since I've paid attention to this, and I think some non-angst crept in. Wft? Where did my depression go? Oh well, I actually really like this.
A/N 2: follow the tag for the rest

( part 13 )

genre: au, fandom: oc, genre: experimental, genre: woe, fic: supernatural

Comments 11

beege22 February 12 2009, 06:15:03 UTC

Quite nicely done, sort of upbeat but in a low-key life-goes-on-and-sometimes-it-doesn't-suck sort of way. Liked how you handled the breakup with parker (not with a bang but a whimper, heh) and Ethan getting killed off-screen (or should that be off-page?), because that's really all he deservedm (shades of Lindsay's 'Angel kills me ( ... )

xwaltzforvenus February 12 2009, 12:15:56 UTC

I think you may have wanted Parker's exit to be bigger than he deserves. I kind of just wanted him out of the way.

The Seth/Summer part was probably my favorite scene. Maybe of this whole thing. I don't really know why.

beege22 February 13 2009, 02:31:13 UTC

No, Parker's exit didn't need to be any bigger, I just thought he didn't deserve any degree of forgiveness or guilt from the main characters - he wasn't worthy of even that much consideration.

fifimom February 12 2009, 11:11:44 UTC

Lovely update but now I'm really scared. So much happiness...can it last? Thanks.

xwaltzforvenus February 12 2009, 12:13:20 UTC

I dunno... depends how sadistic my muse gets next time.

Thanks!

kazfloyd February 12 2009, 11:52:09 UTC

Great update! I really like how you have them all coming around. The motel scene was done well. I like how you got rid of Parker. Aww, poor Seth. Summer and Seth were very cute together. Taylor and Ryan were very them too, she was seeing her solidier off to war. LOL. So in character.

xwaltzforvenus February 12 2009, 12:13:52 UTC

Heh. The soldier line might be my favorite...

taylorforever February 12 2009, 14:49:43 UTC

Nice exit for Parker, could have ended worse for him. I like the Taylor/Ryan conversation. How could we humor your muse? Beege22 is right, we have enough to deal with Brandy`s Taylor.

xwaltzforvenus February 13 2009, 04:06:08 UTC

I ended it like that with Parker cause I just wanted him gone. Next plot point, please!

marsalka February 13 2009, 02:49:17 UTC

:) they're all kind of sort of happy! wonder how long that will last?

xwaltzforvenus February 13 2009, 04:06:23 UTC

Hmmm.... I wonder...