The Timeless Tales - Chapter I

[xypnise]

The Timeless Tales
By: Alex Livanos

Book I: The Beginning
Chapter I: The Lovely Lady Who Would Be Prominent
      Once upon a time, in the far-away land of Amberlé, lived a beautiful young lady. Her story was one that would change the way the people of the future would know her as. It was this courageous, beautiful and enchanting woman that would set

Comments

[serenitytouched]

Interesting so far. I'm kind of 'eh' about how sweet/pure/amazing Yeuffie is sounding currently. Maybe more can be learned from her past hardships to identify with, but it's just that anyone that's so amazing/popular who doesn't seem to have any faults makes me feel like it's too pure of a person.

I'm not saying it's bad, I'm just giving my thoughts on it so far. I have no idea how the story progresses, so perhaps I'll learn a bit more.

Overall I think it's well written and you did a great job introducing the characters. Whooooo is him? ^_^

[xypnise]

Yeah, I understand what you're saying. Most of the family's "hardships" have to do with their parents specifically, not Yeuffie and Perditi, but I might make a prequel chapter or a regular chapter down the road explaining in detail what kinds there were. Yeuffie definitely has some faults and she's not perfect, but her faults are meant to be small and few far between each other. She is after all my main character, whom most of the other future characters look up to for inspiration and strength.

Thanks for commenting and giving your feedback! I'll be sure to explain some of her faults in future chapters, as she definitely has some. ^_^

Him is a suprise!! ;D