Lake Kowatapee

[siv_the_fish]

Lake Kowatapee
 Rating: R (can't write NC-17)
Pairings: Al/Ed/Hei
Summary: Alfonse literally stumbles across a beaten Edward. Out of the goodness of his heart he takes in the Edward, but where is the other Alphonse? Taken from the Heiderich's POV.

Part 1: http://community.livejournal.com/zoo_gnosis ( Read more... )

Comments

[truly_wished]

Very interesting, I can't wait for the next chapter!

[cryogenia]

Awwww...I really like this setup, though it's pretty tragic. The little Alfons is lonely and now he thinks he's found a buddy...but what happened to the other Al?

A few suggestions: looks like you've got a stray italics tag such that the entire fic is in italics atm XD;; The other suggestion is that for clarity's sake, you might want to keep it consistent that the Alfons = Alfons. (I noticed that at a certain point you shortened it to 'Al', but since there is an actual Al in the fic too, probably a good idea to keep Alfons written out XD )

[siv_the_fish]

Thanks for the suggestions! I'll start working on them.