Alone

[ehxhfdl14]

He was alone.

A mere hour ago he’d had a home, a family. Now he was alone.

His parents’ territory was safe, the den located behind a thick tangle of thorn-bushes. There was no Mustang pack around; none came, not after his Edward-father had killed the young Mustang. The predator had strayed into their territory- not ours, his parents’- and

Comments

[firebird308]

...I want to hug that poor Edward. ;_; (Not that he'd welcome it.)

[ehxhfdl14]

I know, poor guy, right? Everything he expected from life, he never got. ㅠ_ㅡ
Thanks for the comment! :)

[engine_blue]

;_; I feel for that so much....

You could do a lot with a story about that/with that.

[ehxhfdl14]

You're helping the bunny asexually reproduce :X
Gaugh. I never thought I'd be getting literary!bunnies on top of illustration!bunnies @-@
Speaking of which, I should draw some more icons for usage...

P.S. You wrote the vacation fics, didn't you? *Hero worship*
And I know that because I am guilty of going through the whole community+lurking...sorry about that. I should go back and comment, LJ confused me too much at first...

[hikaru_9]

I rather liked this one. It was short, but flowed well.

[ehxhfdl14]

I was worrying about sentence/paragraph flow, so I fixed it up after I had a few hours' sleep. Glad to know it worked! Thank you for the comment^-^

[brightygurl]

WAY TO GO!! *Loves so far*

[ehxhfdl14]

Yay! ^-^♥ I only have a vague idea for the future (involving a Psiren, oddly). Hopefully I'll be able to make something out of it, but if I can't...well, this kind of works as a standalone.
Thank you!

[engine_blue]

ahhh, I really like this! And your icon is about the cutest thing ever. :3

I really liked this part: He and Alphonse-brother had helped, a bit. But the spikes they produced couldn’t hold a candle to the impressive feats of alchemy their father had demonstrated. because not only the images and comparisons are interesting, but the ability to compare it to the real world is, too. Also, it shows us a really good relationship between the characters, their moods, and the way they think. Yay! very effective

[ehxhfdl14]

I tried to edit so people could see the connection to the real world more. I say "edit" here as I was just typing the storyline that came into my mind the first time around as quickly as possible, since I am plagued by random bouts of forgetfulness. Haha;;
The Edward knew that his parents could kick him out one day(what with the little hints and all), but didn't actually think it was really coming until the father Edward made it final. I didn't quite want it to be "Get the F- out of here you -" but not "Sorry, honey, but could you please leave?" either, so I settled for something in-between. I thought that it was just part of a natural pattern, and not as shocking as the situation would be if the family was a human one. Just kind of suck it up and move on, you know? (-ε

[engine_blue]

ahh, i'm just getting used to reading nothing but relationship fics and doujins, which tend to be emotionally piled on and very dramatic. *shakes out head* Strange things come out when I do that. -o.-o

But yeah, you should be proud: you've successfully done what you set out to do, and people liked it, too. <3 can't get better than that, except maybe fame and/or money, but none of that in my threadbare pockets! heh heh. ^^;

You're welcome. ^__^

[ehxhfdl14]

Ah, I know when that happens. Idea doujins in particular has a habit of slamming me with the emotion. Hahaha;;

Fortune and fame, eh? Hmm. Yeah, I'm feeling quite broke lately, too ㅠ_ㅠ

[darthneko]

I really like it! Short and bittersweet... poor Edward. I like the bluntness of it - it's not overdone, it's just right.

[ehxhfdl14]

Thank you very much for your comment :)
I tried to be blunt while putting a touch of emotion in it, and apparently it worked ヾ(´∀`*)ノ

By the way, is that a gold dutch rabbit in your icon? It's so adorable!