Unfinished (Mello/Near)

[flamika]

Title: Unfinished
Author: Flamika (flamika)
Claim: Mello/Near (pairing)
Rating: 17+ (adult language, sexual situations)
Notes: Definite spoilers up to Page 99, but also a slight spoiler warning for Page 104.

Comments

[umadoshi]

Mello dresses like sin and madness, and Near still looks like a cottonball, only slightly larger.

This is by far my favorite line, but I like the whole thing. *^^*

[flamika]

I liked that phrase as well. XD Thanks for reading!

[icemint]

x) that's my favourite line, too!

[norrell]

Ditto.
This was awesome!

[cheloya]

Seconding umadoshi on the line-that-made-me-laugh-loudest, but I think #18 really got me. =( They deserved better. Better characterisation, and more time. =( There are a few phrases that could have been worded more... gracefully, but they were from Mello, so that probably wouldn't have sounded right, either. =)

[flamika]

There are a few phrases that could have been worded more...

(Out of curiosity, which ones?)

Yeah, Mello has a very rough/casual way of speaking, as one translator said (actually, their exact words were "like Wolverine." O_O I just took that to mean rough/casual).

[shyunpo]

Like I previously said before: You are worshipped as your writing.. is amazing. ♥

[flamika]

Thank you! ^^

[moontyger]

This is really lovely, but so very sad.

[flamika]

M + N = Sad Little Me ;_;

[moontyger]

*sigh* Yeah, pretty much. I gave my latest M/N story a happy ending, except not really because we all know it doesn't last. Still makes me sad, though.

And for some reason, people look at you like you're nuts when you explain you are crying because of a fanfic about a manga.

[chibi_plum]

Definitely some cherry poppin'. LOL. I wish I could understand all of this. But, as always, lovely depiction! ^_^

[flamika]

One day you shall understand... hopefully. ;)