Inconceivable: 2 sonnets and 1 song (LJi s8e5)

[cloworora]

Act I - Sonnet

When we were all young with our fullest hearts
He was quieter than most, fearful of fate
What of girls, made of all fixed, baffling parts?
The signs were clear; everyone assumed him straight
He grew into closeted desire and pride
His father’s domineering gaze, naming crime
The classes filled with couples as he died
What did his father want

Comments

[basric]

Original and well done.

[cloworora]

I try to be original. I try to do something different every entry. Thanks for reading and your kind words, as always!

[ecosopher]

I'm glad you resolved this, I think I would have been so sad if they hadn't reconciled! But my favourite one was the first one. So achingly sad and so beautiful.

[cloworora]

I think the first sonnet is the strongest point, yeah. The ending was sweet and ties it up nicely, but everyone loves the sad points, the pains; what it is to live. Thanks for reading.

[mac_arthur_park]

Damn. Really powerful, painful stuff.

[cloworora]

I thought you'd appreciate that. Thanks for reading!

[noodledays]

this is really lovely - I like the movement/evolution through the acts.

[cloworora]

Thank you! I decided on Acts since it was so Shakespearean to begin with.

[whipchick]

Neat to see you playing with form!

[cloworora]

Cool beans. Thanks for reading!