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Penguin challenge by Aria

Oct 12, 2009 23:25

Title: Follow Without Pride
Author: Aria
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski
Rating: PG
Word Count: 4899
Summary: In which Diefenbaker chases a car, Ray buys a stuffed penguin, and Fraser gets a clue.

( Follow Without Pride )

penguin challenge

Comments 45

bluebrocade October 13 2009, 05:46:09 UTC

Excellent. I especially like the part about sick days.

ariastar October 13 2009, 14:14:39 UTC

Thank you!

labellementeuse October 13 2009, 08:02:24 UTC

OH ARIA. I LOVE THIS. EVERY TINY DETAIL.

"Yes you are," Ray interrupted, with such quiet intensity that Fraser stared at him in astonishment. Ray was still watching the road. "You could've made something up, but you didn't. You just -- backed off and didn't say anything, and it was up to me, but if it's up to me -- if it's up to me I'm not gonna do it. I'm tired of making things up and chasing ... I've done this road before, Frase, so either we're going to do this thing or you're telling me right now, for good, that we're not, and I will drop it, it'll be done."

OH RAY. HIS LITTLE TINY BREAKABLE DELICATE HEART. I love EVERYTHING about that speech bubble - everything about that whole conversation, actually. It's like breakup-makeup (my favourite genre ever) pre-actual-relationship! AMAZING.

ariastar October 13 2009, 14:16:06 UTC

:DDD! I love that you used the phrase "speech bubble" there, actually, because now I'm picturing that scene as a painfully earnest cartoon. Ray's tiny breakable delicate heart gets its own panel!

I mean, um. Thank you. <3

luzula October 13 2009, 08:59:10 UTC

Yay, new fic from you!

Ray repaid the willingness in like kind, risk for risk. It was, as Ray said, a serious something.

Oh, Fraser. &hearts So Ray has to jump in front of a bullet for you again before you'll commit to a relationship.

Also, I love your Dief.

ariastar October 13 2009, 14:19:00 UTC

I have mentioned that I have a theory that Fraser falls in love with people if they risk their lives for him, right? Jumping in front of bullets is exactly the sort of thing Ray should be doing!

I think I love writing Dief, so I'm delighted you loved him. :D

fairestcat October 13 2009, 17:03:01 UTC

&hearts:

I especially love how you write the conversation between Fraser and Dief.

ariastar October 13 2009, 17:48:05 UTC

It seems the most sensible way for them to communicate! :)

Thanks. <333

pharis October 13 2009, 23:25:02 UTC

So sweet! I love that they have the time, and the trust, to correct that mistake of "it's done." "There was no obligation here, no atonement" -- and no game-playing; they're on solid ground with each other and can change their minds.

ariastar October 14 2009, 00:19:43 UTC

and no game-playing; they're on solid ground with each other

Oooh, yes! That's a wonderful way to read their relationship at any time, so that it came across so here delights me. Thanks. <3