run-on over me

Jan 20, 2010 01:19

run-on over me
minsu; r
romance/angst
1,038 words

'I fear those big words, Stephen said, which make us so unhappy.' - James Joyce, Ulysses
at least there are some things - these things - he still comes to you for. )

fic, p:minsu, dbsk

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blurmeese January 20 2010, 12:01:50 UTC
oh ;; Minsu isn't a pairing I read too often since I can't...seem to see the dynamics behind them but this was just lovely. Every word felt perfectly calculated to flow into place, every sentance linked up without sparing a beat. That one line about hurt and love in ii was exceptionally good to me :D

hyung, he says. mockingly.
kasdjnsa Changmin in two lines.

And of course, that one run-on line in iv, god it felt like it was more of a dance more than anything. Seamless, smooth, something out of a dream. Memming because this was just so good to read.

because even if you loved him better than than->then?

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latenightchai January 20 2010, 16:06:32 UTC
thank you so much bb! ♥ you always leave such thoughtful comments (and ninja-like! i hadn't even posted this anywhere yet, lol :O) but this was such a splurge of stream-of-consciousness and rhythm, and i was very much going for the effect you described... so yay! rofl ;D

fixed! thanks again ^^;

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itsplashes January 20 2010, 16:47:50 UTC
since I can't...seem to see the dynamics behind them

Jo. This looks like I need to convince you. ):

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itsplashes January 20 2010, 16:46:52 UTC
Was supposed to write articles or maybe sleep but damn it, procrastination. ): I really enjoyed this. I think it's quiet but very powerful although I admit that one long, run-on paragraph made my head ring a bit so I went back and reread it. I understand the meaning behind it, though. It adds to the feeling.

Junsu is, really, the most mysterious of the boys.

Thanks for sharing, bb.

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latenightchai January 20 2010, 17:03:50 UTC
ah, procrastination, i know it well... i feel like the majority of my fics have been written when I was supposed to be doing something else, lol. but still, thank you for taking the time to read! i'm happy you enjoyed, all head ringing aside ;D

he realty is, isn't he? ♥

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justynapoland January 20 2010, 18:54:47 UTC
*sighs* i've always had a soft spot for minsu *sighs*

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latenightchai January 20 2010, 19:09:24 UTC
thank you for reading! ♥

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nizzerd January 21 2010, 04:55:43 UTC
I'm so glad to see some Minsu!!! I never get enough~

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latenightchai January 21 2010, 05:54:00 UTC
haha, thank you! :D

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plawehr January 21 2010, 11:49:14 UTC
you. you wrote this so, so, so beautifully. and to think that i love yoomin so much. you're amazing ;_;v

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dystopialights January 21 2010, 17:38:04 UTC
thank you ♥ i'm a fan of yoomin as well just about any min pairing, really lol but i'm glad you could enjoy this too!

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