my non fiction piece

[emolee816]

please read and leave comments, criticism, etc. this is due friday so please read asap! thanks and enjoy!

Comments

[hardball88]

chillings descriptions...you know when to describe and when to be blunt and it gives the story a sense of life/reality. Maybe a quick spellcheck and work on some transitions and it'd be a straight A paper in my mind......

[heartcavity]

I completely missed this when you posted it. I must have scrolled too fast or something.

I love it. It made my heart beat faster, transmitting the nervousness to me - a bit daring, but that's the good part about it, it's very exposing.