Concrit Post 5

[hmd_meme]

How's My Driving?

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[ideally_awesome]

netherworld_rpg

Mod
Laharl (Disgaea) overlordinate
Sarge (Red vs. Blue) yougongetsarged

memento_eden

Laharl (Disgaea) yournewoverlord
Axel (Disgaea 2) garbage_phoenix
Chrona (Soul Eater) mybloodis_black
Guy Cecil (Tales of the Abyss) fontaku
Planned: Zengar Zombolt (Super Robot Wars) year_of_zengar

srw_unlimited

Kurtis (Disgaea) robot_penguin
Kittan Bachika (Gurren Lagann) k_alliteration
Heero Yuy (Gundam Wing) an_heero
Nono (Diebuster) no_no_really
Planned: Arado Balanga (Super Robot Wars) canthitme_ow

Also considering Maka Albarn (Soul Eater) yuusha_oujou for theskytides.

Yeah, I'm this stupid.

[dormition]

WELL. HM. The only concrit I have is about his voice. (OU Kaworu, that is.)

I haven't seen The Episode in a while but I always had the impression that he was blunt and straightforward. Your Kaworu meanders a bit and adds a lot of qualifiers (really, quite, somewhat, etc.) which I think is natural for a philosophical type, but try not to overdo it. I've also always gotten a sense of urgency from him in canon; whether that's because he literally was going through a fast timeline he had to adhere to or just part of his personality, I'd like to see that represented more - or, if not represented, then dealt with. What has it been like without having that mission? Is it aimless? Does he feel more free

[carnality]

@dramadramaduck
-- goddamn_ironman: Tony Stark
-- dosliciouscake: GLaDOS
-- idkmybffcancer: Dr. James Wilson
-- clearyourhead: Dr. Jonathan Crane

@fallenpedestals
-- astrapios: Zeus

@sixwordstories
-- advocate_to: Balthazar {oc}
-- skinlikesilk: Caesar Marcely {oc}
-- dehumanise: ABEL {oc}

[thedawniscoming]

Are you ready for my normal million word response

[xo_gunner]

OKAY ONE MORE TIME

[devilishkurumi]

Pretty much like everyone else, I love all of your characters. TBH, the only thing that worries me is how little faith you have in yourself when playing with like, Wilson and Crane (and GLaDOS? idk, you haven't pushed her much). You have no reason to be so anxious about how you play them and it kind of shows in your activity - you're really active with Tony because you're so confident with him, but because you're constantly worrying about Crane and Wilson you tend to not post with them/respond with them as much?

Basically you're awesome, but you need to realize it already. :| this icon is way too appropriate

(Also, I don't bug you about it but I want to RP Caesar and Wolf/Angus goofing off more because man, Caesar just bounces with them so well.)

[ttlynotawizard]

ms_elegante

Remy (OC)- ttlynotawizard

Jane (OC)- morequartersplz

Old/dropped/dead/homeless/being picked up again

Xanxus (KHR) - xanxus

Squalo (KHR)- im_a_shaaark

Raphael Sorel(Soul Calibur)- ambitiousblond and stocattarampage

Phoenix Wright (Ace Attorney) - wrightdefense and turnaboutlawyer

Tamaki (Ouran Host Club) - prince_type

[nonoise]

dramadramaduck

Haruhi Fujioka | aliceinouran
Belphegor | oopscockroach
Nill | nonoise
Mikuru Asahina | iyaaan
Ryoji Mochizuki | bymidnight

crucible_rpg

Lily Rammsteiner | notherfavourite

and why the hell not; 8_dressing

Tieria "Moeria" Erde | iyaansounfit
Soran Ibrahim | godlessworld
Latias | sisterguardian
Ilatieria-Erde Swan | doesnotbelieve

[nonoise]

Your Bel seems too focus a little too much on the crack and not so much on the sharper aspects of his personality.

Your Nill is very well done though, as is Haruhi. Great job there~

[unspeakingly]

asdlf Thank you so much for that ♥ Bel is one of my characters that I need to develop, so thank you for bringing that to my attention.

And again, thank you! ♥

[nonoise]

You have the carefree part of him down well, maybe try putting him in a difficult situation? Something where his darker streak would come through?

Keep up the good work though ♥