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A Fitting Grave - The Ash Nazg Challenge

Nov 10, 2006 21:14

Name: Serai
Title: A Fitting Grave
Challenge: Hobbit Smut "Ash Nazg" Challenge
Word Count: 735
Rating: G
Summary: The Ring makes a promise.

( A Fitting Grave )

Comments 13

myladylyssa November 11 2006, 21:16:35 UTC

Very fitting and wonderfully written. What a tempting and glorious fantasy the ring offers him. And the voice "from far away on a puff of cold air" (beautiful) which brings him back to his sorrowful senses.

serai1 November 20 2006, 23:58:36 UTC

Thank you. I'm glad you like the fic. The voice kinda made the fic for me. :)

celandine_g November 12 2006, 16:12:05 UTC

I really enjoyed this little piece. The imagery and dark mood you so wonderfully conveyed, showed the insidious nature of the Ring and how it uses everyone's dark side against them. I loved how you enlarged on this theme--suggested by Tolkien in Sam's original vision. It was very believable as the Ring offered Sam his heart's desire (but warped with evil). Only Frodo's goodness and calling voice could counteract the spell's powerful temptation. And how well it did. Very nice.

serai1 November 21 2006, 00:02:37 UTC

I'm glad you like it. The central image of Sam thrusting his hands into the soil of Mordor came to me very intensely, and the rest just followed from it.

belleferret November 14 2006, 13:27:37 UTC

This is very powerfully done, full of beautiful and frightening imagry. And so heartbreaking.

serai1 November 21 2006, 00:09:58 UTC

Thanks! The imagery was very strong for me here. :)

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Thanks! serai1 November 21 2006, 00:13:18 UTC

I see Frodo's voice more as distracting Sam from the vision than persuading him to renounce the Ring. Once the contact was broken, it was Sam's sense of himself that brought him back to reality, just as Tolkien said. :)

estelanui November 17 2006, 16:43:28 UTC

This is so beautiful and scary.
You powerfully portrayed the straying of temptation that distorts the positive characteristics in something completely different and changed beyond recognition. So that, also reality, seems lost and out of reach.
Sam!
He started, his hand dropping to his sword, and looked quickly around him.
Thank you, Serai!

serai1 November 21 2006, 00:05:16 UTC

You're welcome! Yes, the great evil of the Ring is how it takes even the best of a person and uses it for evil ends. Poor Sam, to be caught in that net! But he wasn't trapped, not our Sam. :)