madilayn & gmth

[melpemone]

Author: madilayn
Title: On Betrayal
Pairing: Severus/Lucius
Challenge: And should I fall from grace here with you/Will you leave me too? - Smashing Pumpkins, Galapagos

Comments

[twigged]

Oh, the last two lines - what a knife in the back. But I must say, Lucius is quite the recruiter for the Dark Lord! :D And I loved Snape, aware of all Lucius's little conceits, but blind to that seductive machination. <333!

[gmth]

Yes! That part of it was fun to plan/write. And hell, I'd join Voldemort after that kind of recruiting session, too. ;-)

Thank you for the feedback!

[twigged]

You're welcome! Thank you for the yummy fic. I had to reread it once already. :D

[dphearson]

*sighs deeply and sadly*

This was so lovely, and sexy, and so, so sad. Excellent buildop of Severus anger and neediness- it feels so visceral, so there. And then, the last few lines- how utterly devastating.

Lovely work, my dear. Lovely.

[gmth]

Squee! I'm so glad you thought so. Thanks for letting me know. :-)

[amorettea]

This is absolutely fucking BRILLIANT! So very painful and so very, very true. Poor, sweet, Severus, used and abused by everyone. And hot sex, too.

I am in awe. I would quote all my favorite bits but I'll settle for saying the last two lines broke my heart as well as Severus'.

Amorette

[gmth]

I'm not usually this evil to Snape, I promise. ;-) I do love my Lucius to a manipulating bastard, though. I can't seem to write him any other way.

Thanks for the feedback! :-)

[jeddy83]

Oh, this is such a marvellous seduction. There's such fatality about it too, everything leading to that one fateful moment.

[gmth]

*happy* I'm so glad you thought so. Thanks for the feedback!

[snapetoy]

You know you killed me, right?

I'm crying like a baby here - Severus is so needy, so desperate, so wanting-- and knowing that he is undeserving and alone, just by virtue of his position in the power structure.

God, Gina - Lucius is *wicked*, totally totally wicked, able to offer him everything - affection, revenge, power, and Severus' need to believe is so damned strong.

Severus! *wails*

That damned, damned Dumbledore. Dumbledore sighed. "And although it pains me to do it, I must ask that you not share what transpired this evening with any of your fellow students." Bloody, fucking hell!

had his father not sold them before he returned to Hogwarts That was when I started crying. It was like a blow to the gut, hard and hurtful

[gmth]

*snuggles* This sounds horrible, but I'm so glad that bit about Snape's father selling the cauldrons got to you. That's my favorite part of this whole fic. It says so much about both Snape and Lucius in just a few words.

Anyway, thanks for letting me know it had an impact on you! Even if it made you sad, I'd be lying if I said I wasn't pleased as punch to hear it. :-)