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Brigits_Flame entry for Jan, Week 1, Angels.

Jan 10, 2009 16:40

“Taking another break?” Lowe asks as I enter the trailer. I close the door behind me, deliberately, carefully, making sure every ounce of that Arizona heat is left beyond the doors.

I flash him a weary smile, slide into a seat across from him, and watch as he swirls the water in his glass. “I see you’re working hard.”

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Comments 18

aisling87 January 11 2009, 03:02:51 UTC

I like this a lot. The attitude of the main character is a great contrast to the magical happenings of the story. It reminds me of something, but I can't quite place what ...

At any rate, great job this week!

intermezzo_poet January 14 2009, 16:03:30 UTC

Thanks! Now I'm curious what it reminds you of... haha.

cedarwolfsinger January 11 2009, 03:48:05 UTC

This is quite amazing. Well done. Very different. Good luck!

intermezzo_poet January 14 2009, 16:03:44 UTC

Thank you so much! :)

jamais_toujours January 11 2009, 04:53:09 UTC

I really enjoyed this. The idea behind it is very interesting and original. Good luck :).

intermezzo_poet January 14 2009, 16:04:09 UTC

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for commenting. :)

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intermezzo_poet January 14 2009, 16:05:41 UTC

Thank you! I really wish I could have spent more time on it, but, oh well. I'm glad you recognized the panic in this piece, too.

Thank you so much!

wierdauntie January 11 2009, 21:37:49 UTC

Excellent!!

Feedback: you could have ended it with “Cara. Cara,” she breathes. “Wings.”

Super potent!

intermezzo_poet January 14 2009, 16:06:04 UTC

I'll certainly consider that; I've been iffy on the ending.

Thank you for your comment! :)