Ughhhh i want more like whoa. But I would just like to say I feel like I've won the fandom lottery, you're by far my favorite Larry writer AND you update way more than regularly AND your fics are long and diverse and so awesome. I just.. . she is so lovely and I picture her as a younger, shorter, Karen Gillan? And I love her similarity to Louis.. and I love sleepy!NIall and that sated!Zayn is so in love with Liam and ughhh the Harry bits... and Liam eating her out because he would, Jesus Payne etc... and I quit.
I'm sorry! I know it's mean to end it like that but it felt like it would be too ~neat to have everyone just making out at the end, you know? And I don't want to get tied up writing series-fic when I have so much other stuff to write. I'm really glad you enjoyed it as it was, though, and that you like my writing in general. Thank you. ♥ And a Karen Gillan lookalike is definitely a good way to picture Max, I like it!!
Ok I'll admit I was a little weirded out about reading het with this band (because it's usually so, so horrible) but it's you so I knew it'd be amazing regardless and IT WAS.
This is like, the perfect amount of OT5 to really be believable and the H/L was done so so perfectly (even though HA HA at the idea of them taking 3 years to ~figure it out irl) and ZIAM. YOU WROTE ZIAM. I have such a soft spot for them (even though fic-wise I'm normally really only interested in H/L) because I love the idea of Zayn being head over heels for Liam and Liam being mostly oblivious.
OK starting from the beginning, I love how you mention it being hard for them to find hook ups because it's something I've always thought about. Like it's assumed that just because so many girls are in love with them it'd be easy, but when you think about the actual logistics of it sneaking people to their hotel, idk. And it's actually really weird that there AREN'T more groupie stories. Unless I'm just looking in the wrong places.
"So is somebody going to kiss me, or are you all just gonna kiss each other? I mean, not that I'd complain about that, but-" she cuts herself off, suddenly looking very embarrassed, blushing, and that's actually quite fetching on her even though it probably ought to just clash with her hair. "Jesus, sorry," she mutters, "have a filter, Max." LMAO OK YES. TO BE MAX. I was half hoping this was around the time it would escalate into a full on orgy buuuuut you opted for believability (and feelings!!), which is even better.
actually, she tastes and smells strangely familiar and it takes Louis a second to realise, to make the connection that fuck, it's Harry. And he doesn't know what it means that he recognises that, and so quickly, and he shudders, pulling away because it's too much somehow, but she makes a little noise and pulls him back in for more and he can't resist, tongue sweeping into her mouth for more of that familiarity. It's scary and reassuring, both at once.;_____________________________________________________________;
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and he's actually in a sort of weird position, Niall realises now, almost like he's keeping his legs tucked out of the way on purpose so that Louis can get a better view of Harry with Max. He catches Zayn's eye and tilts his chin, indicating Zayn's legs, and Zayn just smirks, eyes flicking to his right towards Louis for a split-second. I LOVE WINGMAN!ZAYN.
"You like that he's watching you," Max whispers, and Zayn realises in a flash what's familiar-she's acting like Louis. He realised they were similar right from the start, all sparkly-eyed mischief and boldness, but right now it's more obvious than ever because this is exactly the kind of thing Louis does, pushing something even when he knows he probably shouldn't, just because he's curious and he wants to see what'll happen. Ahaha YES weird dom-y shit-stirrer Louis has found his match.
But then Max says, "Look at him," breathless, her voice hitching high. "It's okay
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My god, that was just heartbreakingly good. I actually, genuinely feel like my own world is going to change having read this? I don't know. This was just, seriously, amazingly powerful writing
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Later as well - But Louis-Louis can't concentrate on anything but the fact that he and Harry are getting jerked off at the same time right now. - it's all so overwhelming to him, but there are moments too where he just shines through his awkwardness - "There's only four," he announces, shaking the box, and he says it sort of overly casually. "Not a problem though, I don't mind sitting this out." He tilts his chin at Max. "No offence, darling. I'm sure your pussy's a fucking wonderland." - and then the bit about his exploration with other guys. It's all just too much, man. It's kind of too perfect.
And then, as if that all wasn't enough - as if the other boys knowing how hard all of this is for Louis (Zayn tries not to think about what Louis probably really wants because it always just makes his heart ache) wasn't enough - the first steps of Harry/Louis just absolutely destroyed me
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Actually, hang on, that's not enough. You need to know how fucking good the bit where Louis watches Harry fucking Max is. I mean, there are a lot of writers who would've tuned her out at that point and focused solely on the boys, because their relationship is the one that matters here, let's be honest; but the way she instigates things between them is so good. The connection between Harry and Louis is so special in this anyway, and she still adds a real extra dimension to the shatteringly tender bond between them with how she pushes Harry. I love how his attention is on her too, until she tells him to look at Louis, because Harry understands, and that goes so fucking perfectly with his naïveté in so much else.
And fucking Zayn sees it. Like, I mentioned in another comment that I don't really connect with Zayn irl, and I found that problematic for some reason; so - obviously - I obsessed over him for a bit, watching and reading Zayn shit, and this is fucking him, man. Like, he's so brash and cool and sexy, but he's also so fucking
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i'm 22 and australian i totally didn't imagine myself as max
even though i normally find reading het for this fandom so weird there was no way i couldn't read something you'd written because i knew it would be perfect. and it was. i of course kept being drawn to the louis/harry undertones and it was all kind of really heartbreaking and perfect.
This is seriously the best kind of porn, just with so many emotions and feelings and complicated and attachments and augh. My heart feels a little achy now. But in a good way.
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This fic is the reason the fourth wall exists.
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This is like, the perfect amount of OT5 to really be believable and the H/L was done so so perfectly (even though HA HA at the idea of them taking 3 years to ~figure it out irl) and ZIAM. YOU WROTE ZIAM. I have such a soft spot for them (even though fic-wise I'm normally really only interested in H/L) because I love the idea of Zayn being head over heels for Liam and Liam being mostly oblivious.
OK starting from the beginning, I love how you mention it being hard for them to find hook ups because it's something I've always thought about. Like it's assumed that just because so many girls are in love with them it'd be easy, but when you think about the actual logistics of it sneaking people to their hotel, idk. And it's actually really weird that there AREN'T more groupie stories. Unless I'm just looking in the wrong places.
Louis can tell that, it just-it ( ... )
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LMAO OK YES. TO BE MAX. I was half hoping this was around the time it would escalate into a full on orgy buuuuut you opted for believability (and feelings!!), which is even better.
actually, she tastes and smells strangely familiar and it takes Louis a second to realise, to make the connection that fuck, it's Harry. And he doesn't know what it means that he recognises that, and so quickly, and he shudders, pulling away because it's too much somehow, but she makes a little noise and pulls him back in for more and he can't resist, tongue sweeping into her mouth for more of that familiarity. It's scary and reassuring, both at once.;_____________________________________________________________; ( ... )
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I LOVE WINGMAN!ZAYN.
"You like that he's watching you," Max whispers, and Zayn realises in a flash what's familiar-she's acting like Louis. He realised they were similar right from the start, all sparkly-eyed mischief and boldness, but right now it's more obvious than ever because this is exactly the kind of thing Louis does, pushing something even when he knows he probably shouldn't, just because he's curious and he wants to see what'll happen.
Ahaha YES weird dom-y shit-stirrer Louis has found his match.
But then Max says, "Look at him," breathless, her voice hitching high. "It's okay ( ... )
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And then, as if that all wasn't enough - as if the other boys knowing how hard all of this is for Louis (Zayn tries not to think about what Louis probably really wants because it always just makes his heart ache) wasn't enough - the first steps of Harry/Louis just absolutely destroyed me ( ... )
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And fucking Zayn sees it. Like, I mentioned in another comment that I don't really connect with Zayn irl, and I found that problematic for some reason; so - obviously - I obsessed over him for a bit, watching and reading Zayn shit, and this is fucking him, man. Like, he's so brash and cool and sexy, but he's also so fucking ( ... )
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even though i normally find reading het for this fandom so weird there was no way i couldn't read something you'd written because i knew it would be perfect. and it was. i of course kept being drawn to the louis/harry undertones and it was all kind of really heartbreaking and perfect.
basically this was brilliant and ot5 foreverrr.
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I'm glad you gave this a chance even though you're not usually into het in this fandom, and that you ended up liking it. ♥ Thank you so much!!
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This is seriously the best kind of porn, just with so many emotions and feelings and complicated and attachments and augh. My heart feels a little achy now. But in a good way.
Let me hug you.
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AND AWW KITTY
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