Fic: Life in Miniature Motion: Part Four (SGA: Wee!John)

[kyizi]

Life in Miniature Motion
By Kyizi

Disclaimers etc in Part One

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Comments

[loriel_eris]

[ETA: OMG I broke the goddamned comment limit. By about a thousand characters.]

God, I yell at you for this every. Single. Time but oh god, I can't believe you killed Carson when John was wee. Wee!John is devastated, Sheppard will feel even worse because he wasn't there and will be grieving long after everyone and worst of all Carson doesn't get to see John fixed. I swear to god, I really do hate you right now. Y'know, through the tears that are steaming down my face.

“Can I use a wed pen?” John asks hopefully as the scientist splutters and clenches his fist.

*laughs through the residual tears* (The whole damn section up until this point, is heartbreaking. I still hate you.)

“You is stupid, Wodney.” The boy catches up to him and tucks his hand into Rodney’s. “I don’t hate you, I wuv you.”

“I…” Rodney stops walking and looks down at the boy clutching onto his hand. John’s looking at him as if he’s just gone insane, but he can’t quite move. “I…you do?”

"Wod-ney," John rolls his eyes. "'Cou'se I do."*insert handwaving flailing

[loriel_eris]

[cont'd]

Lorne and Rodney's conversation at the end. Is so much awesome. But I think I would actually break the comment limit if I C&P'ed the awesome bits. I love that you made it that Rodney (and Lorne) felt the loss more, differently, from the rest. That Rodney (they) actually lost someone. So much more poignant.

I really feel that whatever aftermath I deal with will need to be Sheppard’s story.

Yes. This. A million times omg this, because, have I mentioned THREE. YEARS?!!!???!!!!? All that stuff that John missed. And people changing. And how are Lorne and John going to deal with command. Because Lorne's been doing it for three years. But I Atlantis is John both in soul, and command. And I swear, you're not taking that away from John. But jesus, John missed three goddamned years. You know what, this is Alias all over again. I swear to god, it is, and that still makes me flaily and incoherent and omg how could they do that. Just, y'know, to forewarn you what to expect from me for the next decadeAnd omg god, you've made me

[kyizi]

Okay, words cannot express how utterly nervous I was waiting for your reaction, because wee!John has been your flailing point for as long as it's been mine. I don't think I'd've written anything past the original five things if it hadn't been for you, so yeah, so nervous! I should be asleep right now, but I had to wait for you to finish!

The end? When I spoke to you on the phone, I actually had it finishing at the end of the scene in Sheppard's room, but it just felt like I wasn't done, so I added the next two scenes. I'm glad that you understand why I really couldn't deal with more of the aftermath from Rodney's PoV, because it needs to be John. I need to deal with Elizabeth's story and possibly a bit more of Lorne's (maybe even Cadman's), but really I need Sheppard to be the one to round the whole thing off.

I'll reply to the rest tomorrow, I just wanted to say rtfn *smooooooch* and thanks for the feedback, sweetie!

[loriel_eris]

Oh honey! I'd've read quicker if I could've! And it is awesome.

The end. Hmm, if you'd finished is with Rodney and Sheppard in Sheppard room, I think it would've made there seem to be more Sheppard than there was. (Not saying that this is a good or bad thing, just that John&Rodney bias would've happier. (You will note, that all my bias needed was the appearance of more John&Rdney. *headdesk* Yeah, I don't know either...) However, I think know that it would have short-changed Rodney's story. And given that this is Rodney's story and not hi-there-my-biases-let-me-show-you-them, we'll go for not short-changing Rodney being a good thing. *g*

You're welcome. *g* *smooches back*

[syble4]

If I can stop crying long enough, I'll tell you how wonderful this is. You had me in tears for the whole last part.

I've wanted you to write how John gets changed back into Sheppard forever, but now I feel like Rodney at the end, and I'm really sad - and happy - that it finally happened.

Of course, now I can not wait until your muse has you writing the next bit from John's pov. I love that you left him with all his memories intact.

Oh and you made me love Lorne even more with his understanding and friendship with Rodney.

Thank you!!

[kyizi]

Oh! Honey, *hugs* I'm so glad you liked this and I have to say that I'm so grateful to you for all your reviews throughout this fic. It means a lot to see people who've been there pretty much from the start seeing this to the end with me and still enjoying it.

Thank you again!

[kyizi]

Lorne and Rodney's weird friendship was something that came out of this more by itself than by any effort on my part and I'm just really glad it came across well. Thank you so much for your reviews throughout this 'verse, it's not over yet, but the main story has been told and I love having people around who've been there since the start. So, yeah, thanks!

[romyra]

I've been following the wee!John snippets for a while now and I really want to thank you for giving us the full story. It was a wonderfully original take on a useful trope and I adored every moment of it. A simply beautifully beguiling tale.

[kyizi]

Thank you so very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I really appreciate that you took the time to review this :)

[gail19]

Thank you.

I'd list all the extra special bits, but I'd just be copying most of the story over, so I'll refrain from cluttering up your space.

[kyizi]

That's so nice to hear! Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed and I really appreciate the review.