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[lacruciverbiste]

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There it goes, my
Last shred of dignity
Falling from me
Like a sequined
Leaf from a naked oak.

There it is, my
Body sacrificed on silver
Heels to shadows
Barking over the bass
And the synthesizers.

Here I am, my
Dreams unraveling, my
Heart breaking, my
Life still
Unstarted.

Comments

[taste_is_sweet]

Here to say that yes! We can read this now!

Fascinating poem. I read it twice, and it's very evocative. I'm not sure I entirely understand it, but I've made up a story for it in my mind, which might be close....:)

Thank god!

[lacruciverbiste]

Whew. so glad it's read-able. tell everyone! haha

And thanks for the compliment. It's all about making it your own story. So I'll leave you to your own ideas instead of clarifying. :)

Merci!
~La Cruciverbiste

[drippedonpaper]

I really liked this. I really identified with the last stanza a lot. You say so much so perfectly in so few words. Carefully chosen, yet few words standing all alone can say so much.

Just three stanzas but says it all.

I like the image of a falling leaf, shred of dignity too. Very original.

Thanks so much for sharing. I'm still rereading the last stanza over and over.

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[innana88]

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[cedarwolfsinger]

This is very good. Sad but lovely. Good luck!

[intermezzo_poet]

So sad...

I loved this.