Comments | mel0804: Obscurity

mel0804

Obscurity

Jan 14, 2008 15:57

Pairing: Ennis/Jack
Rating: PG-13 to NC-17 (Warning: violence !)
Summary: AU_AU. This is a story about fear, uncertainty and doubt but also about friendship and love. Ennis and Jack meet each other in the modern time.
Dedication: This story is dedicated to my German beta tanzmaeusi, who encouraged me to write this story. I also want to thank judy-blue-cat who helped me ( Read more... )

obscurity (in english)

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Wow gentleposter January 15 2008, 04:11:20 UTC

I had wondered where this story had gotten to; it seemed abandoned. I'm so glad it wasn't! I love the atmosphere and your quenching of their deep loneliness together. More please!

Thanks,
Susan

Re: Wow mel0804 January 15 2008, 07:40:11 UTC

Oh no, this story is finished in German so no need to worry about the translation ;-).
We will finish it but tizi and me had both been ill during the holidays and tizi is also translating "The Sequel" - so she's quite busy... ;-).

trekfan January 15 2008, 04:45:30 UTC

Lovely story, Mel. You captured the loneliness and despair very powerfully.

I am glad that Ennis is caring for Jack, what happened to Jack that he did not wish to go to the hospital?

He could have gone to a clinic instead, it sounded like he needed some kind of antibiotic.

I wonder who lives in the better apt, Jack or Ennis? or do they both live in poorly furnished homes?

mel0804 January 15 2008, 07:45:44 UTC

It's Jack who lives in the better apt but to be honest both men don't really care. They had been so lonely and no one ever visited so there was no need to invest in their living although both would have the money.

Jack is afraid of going to a hospital and to be at someones mercy. His experiences after his bashing were burned into his soul and he simply doesn't want to go through it again.

aileenfan January 15 2008, 08:54:05 UTC

Oh, it's so wonderful, amazing and touching story!!! I love it!!!

mel0804 January 16 2008, 19:50:06 UTC

Thank you !
I'm so glad you liked it !

poppyhoney_67 January 15 2008, 08:56:52 UTC

The writing in this story is just so painfully beautiful. I love how you explore Ennis's depths of despair, and his realisation that now, with Jack, he has a purpose in life. The gorgeous scene when he walked over to Jack and sat next to him as he lay sleeping, reminded me of SNIT somehow. I can't wait until Jack wakes up.

mel0804 January 16 2008, 19:51:32 UTC

when he walked over to Jack and sat next to him as he lay sleeping, reminded me of SNIT somehow

Oh wow - this is interesting ! It wasn't planned like that - but you are right...!!

bbm_citygirl January 16 2008, 04:06:52 UTC

How you create beauty in this sad and lonely world is really lovely to see. Your story so captivates me.

mel0804 January 16 2008, 19:52:04 UTC

Thank you.
It means a lot for me !