i've been losing sleep.

[oohfeisty]

routinesshe wakes up & searches for

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i've been losing sleep as well, but for entirely different reasons.

[photoflood]

this was nice, but i think maybe it would look better if it was just a paragraph? it doesn't seem to FLOW like i think many poems do. it just read more like prose, to me. if you really meant it to be a poem though, by all means dont change it! you're allowed to be creative with structure & things of that sort. it's what makes writers different from each other. anyway, thank you very much for posting!

Re: i've been losing sleep as well, but for entirely different reasons.

[oohfeisty]

thanks for the feedback! i tried it a different way as well. still trying to decide what i like better.

[blo0dstained]

This hits close to home.

[sugar_buzzed]

I really like this piece. I think I like it better in paragraph form--It has better flow. great job:)

[origami_gown]

i really liked this one

[mrshannibal]

amazing and very touching...

thanks

[oohfeisty]

thank you

[mrshannibal]

you are more than welcome

keep up the wonderful work

just wondering - what inspires you?

[oohfeisty]

this is so cliche but..my sadness. also reading other people's amazing work.