LJ Idol Week 5: "Building a Better Mousetrap"

[onda_bianca]

It was 2010 when I wore my heart on my sleeve and the man of my dreams blew his nose on it

Comments

[n3m3sis43]

I really enjoyed your first line--very attention-grabbing.

[onda_bianca]

Thanks:)

[karmasoup]

I've always loved your interior rhyme and rhythm, how you turn prose into poetry, but this genuinely feels like it should be a country song. Not that I like country all that much... maybe blues rock, better!

[onda_bianca]

Thanks. Life during that time actually felt like a country song!

[suesniffsglue]

This really resonated with me. It was 2007 when I wore my heart on my sleeve and a man blew his nose in it--and then I found your wordplay and I remember my facebook status in the aftermath: "Impuslive, compulsive, repulsive." I really enjoyed. And I'm sorry you had to go through this, but it made for nice writing for sure

[onda_bianca]

Thanks so much

[jem0000000]

*hugs* Good for you. I'm glad you got away.

[onda_bianca]

Thanks, I'm glad too:)

[jem0000000]

You're welcome.

[eska818]

Feels like poetry, but written like prose! I do like the way you told this story, and good on you for finally taking a stand. :)

[onda_bianca]

Thanks...:)