Middle of Nowhere - Chapter 16

[poppyhoney_67]

 
Title: Middle of Nowhere
Disclaimer: These characters are not mine. They were created by Annie Proulx. I make no money from this and don't want to.
Rating: NC-17 for the whole story
Thanks: To Em (smilesalot) for all your help and support, and to Keren for your constant encouragement, it means so much to me. 
Feedback: Oh yes please!! I appreciate

Comments

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi Kathy, thanks for your comment and I'm glad you thought the chapter worked despite the angst level. Ennis is being Ennis, and thinks that Jack will be better off without him. Jack wont be in the water much longer, dont worry. Thanks for reading.

[smiles_a_lot]

Hey C: I hope you found the stash of peanut butter - extra crunchy - on the top shelf. And two types of chocolate - milk and dark. Don't nobody say I don't take my beta job serious.

I hope there's room for me in the bunker because I loved this chapter. And, I don't hate Carrie as much as others. Because, ya know, if Jack was gallivanting around in swim shorts I'd be all over him like a wet shirt, whether or not he welcomed my advances!!

I did feel awful for the boys at the end. Something about sorrow and water, just totally does me in. Some fine writing there, my girl. From your beta who luvz ya. xx Em

[poppyhoney_67]

Hey Em....I really need that peanut butter and chocolate, I'm upsetting everyone left right and centre!! Yeah I feel sorry for Carrie, she cant help being captivated by Jack's shorts!! I know I always am! Poor Jack, he's so sad. Thanks for all your help, support and supplies of food, which are much needed and appreciated...xxxxx

[eandj]

Finally the long overdue conversation
Jack talked about all they should have talked days ago. And then Ennis is acting like---Ennis.
But I think he only needs some more time to rethink this- perhaps next chapter???
Love your story
Paula

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi Paula, thanks for your comment, yes that conversation, it had to happen, but it wasnt how Jack thought it would be. Please hold on as the next chapter will help I hope. Thanks for reading.

[freetraveller15]

Beautifully written and paces, as always, but OMG the angst! The last scene had me on the edge of my seat, fearing the worst for Jack nearly frozen in the water with Ennis feeling sick himself.

I loved this bit:
But how do you wipe out a time of joy never felt before, leaving no trace. And did he really want that?

and this one too:
Ennis heard the intake of breath like it was a steam train putting on its brakes, and realised the sound was coming out of his own mouth. .

I was also very taken by Ennis's decision not to ask Justin where he'd heard the gossip about Jack, but stopped in his tracks for fear of making him sound like he cared too much.
And at the same time, Jack's pride in not wanting to cry in front of Ennis...

Thank you so much for sharing :)
Paola

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi Paola thank you so much for your lovely comment, despite the angst. Its so hard for both of them, Jack feels dejected and Ennis is convinced Jack would not want a relationship once camp is over...I am hoping to get the next chapter out soon.

[bbm_lover]

Hey Christie,
What an angst-filled chapter. Ennis avoiding Jack and Jack not knowing how to approach Ennis. Its good Jack put Carrie off and told her he was not interested. That dialogue betw J&E very realistic. Jack telling Ennis his feelings "this is about having you in my life, about me being in your life, about us being together. It’s that simple". Ennis being Ennis tries to avoid what he's feeling and wants to hide. Jack is devastated and jumps into the lake to escape cause "he didn’t care, not any more". Your writing is so vivid, its like being there watching Jack's pain and Ennis's insecurity and denial. Hope nothing bad happens to Jack, afterall its freezing in the lake and its raining to boot. Maybe now Ennis will realise how much Jack means to him and this "thing" betw them. Cant wait to read the next chapter. Wonderful writing as usual Christie. Thanks.
Jess

[poppyhoney_67]

Hi Jess, thanks so much for your great and lovely comment. So glad you liked it and found the whole thing believable, that was important to me. I am writing the next chapter, hope it wont be long before I can post it.