Revision RequestreimsadminApril 29 2011, 04:05:33 UTC
After reading over and discussing your application, we would like a few revisions. They are as follows:
-In the setting of Reims Academy, Marluxia is not heartless, so we would like to see an expansion in the Personality section to delve into why he's so unemotional and cold. What things caused him to become so detached?
-The AU History is extremely short and bare. It doesn't reflect where a lot of his personality comes from. Between graduating from Reims at age 18 and recently getting a job at Reims at age 27, there's a lot of years not even touched upon as a college degree only takes half that time. What did he do during this time? Also, why did he come to despise his parents? Please expand greatly on this section.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any questions or need clarification, please contact us.
Personality: As a child, Marluxia was neglected by his parents. He was an heir and nothing more. Because of this, he began to grow distant from people, and even cold from the lack of a concrete bond with his parents early in life. He had a nanny, sure, but they were always coming and going. Because he had no constant source of affection, he came to not put trust into emotional bonds. He didn't have friends in school because of this, and often stayed to himself.
Marluxia was born to Anton and Urania Hawthorne, a lawyer and a surgeon respectively. He was an heir and nothing more to them, and so spent his earliest years handed off from nanny to nanny. This has lead to him having no concrete bonds and growing an actual resentment for them. But those are his early years
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Application Accepted!reimsadminApril 26 2011, 21:13:16 UTC
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Application Accepted!reimsadminApril 26 2011, 21:09:38 UTC
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Application Accepted!reimsadminApril 29 2011, 04:49:28 UTC
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We appreciate your effort and look forward to role-playing with you!
We would like to caution you on minding the 4th Wall. Whereas it is canon for Japan to be an otaku, we would like you to use alternate names for things, like instead of calling it Final Fantasy, you could call it Last Dream. It you look in the Rules, there is a link to handy little generic name generator in the section that talks about the 4th Wall.
Revision RequestreimsadminApril 30 2011, 08:41:36 UTC
After reading over and discussing your application, we would like a few revisions. They are as follows:
-The subject of terrorism is a very sticky thing in this game. We've discussed the history of terrorism in this app and have decided you handled it well and, as a faculty member, it's realistic. Unfortunately, we are not going to allow Juhno to freelance while employed at Reims. Whereas we understand that terrorism is a very factor in life, it does not fit with the spirit of the game. We would like you to remove the freelancing side job and as long as Junho doesn't talk about his experiences with terrorists to students, we will allow this history.
-The History does not explain why Juhno looked into teaching or what brought him to Reims. Please expand upon this in the history.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any questions or need clarification, please contact us.
Application Accepted!reimsadminMay 1 2011, 05:19:36 UTC
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-In the setting of Reims Academy, Marluxia is not heartless, so we would like to see an expansion in the Personality section to delve into why he's so unemotional and cold. What things caused him to become so detached?
-The AU History is extremely short and bare. It doesn't reflect where a lot of his personality comes from. Between graduating from Reims at age 18 and recently getting a job at Reims at age 27, there's a lot of years not even touched upon as a college degree only takes half that time. What did he do during this time? Also, why did he come to despise his parents? Please expand greatly on this section.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any questions or need clarification, please contact us.
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Also, please comment to the Taken List by Canon and Student/Faculty Directory. Check out your Room Assignments and please visit the Official History-Making Meme to establish existing CR should your character not be a new transfer.
We appreciate your effort and look forward to role-playing with you!
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Also, please comment to the Taken List by Canon and Student/Faculty Directory. Check out your Room Assignments and please visit the Official History-Making Meme to establish existing CR should your character not be a new transfer.
We appreciate your effort and look forward to role-playing with you!
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Also, please comment to the Taken List by Canon and Student/Faculty Directory. Check out your Room Assignments and please visit the Official History-Making Meme to establish existing CR should your character not be a new transfer.
We appreciate your effort and look forward to role-playing with you!
We would like to caution you on minding the 4th Wall. Whereas it is canon for Japan to be an otaku, we would like you to use alternate names for things, like instead of calling it Final Fantasy, you could call it Last Dream. It you look in the Rules, there is a link to handy little generic name generator in the section that talks about the 4th Wall.
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Position: Mathematics (middle and high school)
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-The subject of terrorism is a very sticky thing in this game. We've discussed the history of terrorism in this app and have decided you handled it well and, as a faculty member, it's realistic. Unfortunately, we are not going to allow Juhno to freelance while employed at Reims. Whereas we understand that terrorism is a very factor in life, it does not fit with the spirit of the game. We would like you to remove the freelancing side job and as long as Junho doesn't talk about his experiences with terrorists to students, we will allow this history.
-The History does not explain why Juhno looked into teaching or what brought him to Reims. Please expand upon this in the history.
Please have your revisions submitted within one week from this notice. Should you have any questions or need clarification, please contact us.
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Also, please comment to the Taken List by Canon and Student/Faculty Directory. Check out your Room Assignments and please visit the Official History-Making Meme to establish existing CR should your character not be a new transfer. Please consider introducing yourself in the OOC community!
We appreciate your effort and look forward to role-playing with you!
Position: Computer Science (middle and high school)
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