Halloween fic (yes, I know I'm late)
Title: Dead Man's Party
Author's Note: As many of you know, this is NOT my Gala fic entry (which I personally thought blew and was written solely toward the judges and voila: third place. If I'd taken more than 2 hours and thrown in a heaping dose of spelling errors, I might have even gotten second... end snark). This is part one of my attempt to do ( Read more... )
Author's Note: As many of you know, this is NOT my Gala fic entry (which I personally thought blew and was written solely toward the judges and voila: third place. If I'd taken more than 2 hours and thrown in a heaping dose of spelling errors, I might have even gotten second... end snark). This is part one of my attempt to do ( Read more... )
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Hey, I happen to LIKE candy corn! But I do like candy bars better.
Can't help but feel that Beth is setting them up for a disaster. Entree's don't go to parties with vampires. Mick SO needs to put his foot down at some point.
But then I guess we wouldn't get to see them get dressed up as LRRH and the BBW. And I'm liking it.
Okay, you know you have to continue this, right? We need to know what happens at the party. What will Josef wear? Guillermo? How will Beth be treated?
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Thanks. There is more to come but you guys will probably be more sympathetic if I flake along the way.
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So get moving.
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"Hey, I plan to melt in your mouth and in your hand.” - Oh dear lord I'm feeling a little faint.
He chased the shivers down her neck - that's a beautiful phrase - evocative, erotic, just lovely.
“When do you want me at your apartment?”
“All the time,” - never a truer word spoken. I loved this. And Mick's tortured attempts to sleep - you convey that constant state of anticipation so convincingly. It makes me shiver.
His fingers itched to unwrap her. - I actually started flexing my fingers when I read this. Totally divine phrase.
And then of course, just to keep everyone's feet on the ground, you give us that bittersweet moment of distance, of otherness, to finish.
A new multi-chapter from rijane. Today's a good day.
Red
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“When do you want me at your apartment?”
“All the time,”
Oh, God, that is just too damn good. Your dialogs between those two are always absolute precious...
“For three hours, Mick forced himself to stay in his freezer, unable to slip into the quiet place between asleep and awake. Images rolled through him: Beth in a room full of vampires. Beth dressing him in God only knew what costume. Beth, the smell of blood and sex and sweet.”
I stopped reading for a second after this paragraph to just enjoy the vision and the emotions it evoked... and not for the obvious reasons (Mick in the freezer, dah) :)
And I loved the ending, with just enough hint of angst to cool us off little bit, evil you...:) Lovely, lovely piece. And it is such a treat to read something new from you, ri. I miss it so much... And the promise of multichapter is making my day...
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You're a doll. Happy you dug it. I'm trying to get myself back into an MC rhythm, but this isn't going to be super long. Maybe five parts.
But it will be more thriller/mystery in tone than the stuff I've done before. I'm trying to work on my plot skills.
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Thanks on the Josef note - I find him one of the hardest to write, second only to Coraline (which is why I don't write her ;) )
And you may be right on the Beth bit. She and I are stunningly similar in occupation as well as inclinations (I, too, am pushy, do not think before I speak and would like to sleep with Mick :) )
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