Bank Shot: Bank Deposit (LoveFest Entry # 1)

[smiles_a_lot]

Pairing: Jack/Ennis

Rating: R for smex. Light kink, light bondage, and enough public lewdness to create a disturbance if discovered.

Summary: Jack is a security guard at a bank.  Ennis is a customer who has a safety deposit box at the bank. What did the security cameras see? This is one of three parts.

A/N: I set out to write something dark and

Comments

[poppyhoney_67]

"Ennis, please" indeed!! Holy moly, that was good. Well, I know it was cos I read it a few times already!! Love me a romantic Jack, and his best buddy Sam - what a man! I love him. And Ennis, oh dear god, getting Jack to say those words again, getting Jack handcuffed, and on his knees...oh yes, me likee a lot too. I need a cold shower though, need to get ready for part two, in the library. Yowser.

[smiles_a_lot]

I think we should all have a Sam in our lives. He's like a cross between Hagrid and Hitch. lol. You think maybe Meli and Sam should get together? Ty for all your help. Yowser, you so good. xx Em

[tmn1966]

Wow! Okay, this definitely takes my mind off my troubles! Let's see, if I tick off everything I liked about it, I would be like quoting the whole thing here. I really love Jack in a uniform. The handcuffs are delightful. Ennis sticking the note down Jack's pants for a grope, yummy. Sam is too great for words. The part where Sam is helping Jack get 'presentable' is more than hilarious.

So, um, yeah, can't wait for the next part. Thanks for making me smile, gasp and laugh right out loud.

Teri

[smiles_a_lot]

Yay! You liked the Three Stooges routine! That's one of my favourite parts. I totally remember my bff and I trying to help each other get all gussied up as soon as we spied a love interest coming round the corner. Usually we just made it worse and we'd turn around and we were all sweaty and flustered and embarassed as hell. Glad I was able to spread some happy. xx Em

[annika1968]

That was sweet and HOT. Is there any chance to get the tape of the security cameras? I would pay a lot. Looking for ward to their date at the library.

I wondered about the condom too. But I thought my English is playing a trick on me.

Thanks, Annika

[smiles_a_lot]

Actually, Lucille's already trying to get a copy of the tape off Sam. lol. Did you notice how I generously gave you guys the location for the next meet? You can set up your own cameras!! Once a DSD, always a DSD. Glad you liked this. xx Em

[jacks_key]

Hot damn!!! That was excellent! Jack practicing his "married name" - LOL.

"Zing! went the strings of his hard-on." LMAO!

[smiles_a_lot]

Hey Vicki - I originally wrote "Zing went the strings of his heart" but changed it at the last minute. Glad you liked that edit. It's obvious I've watched waaay too many Judy Garland movies in my lifetime. Thanks! xx Em

[liseron]

Ok honestly I came for the smex obviously , but...I would stay anyway for the most hilarious dialogues I red in a loooong time ! :)))
Sincerely you're really a kinda Master at that !
Sam would quickly become one of my favorite OC if we had the chance to see him again later ( please , please lol...)
I didn't care about the condom thing ,just a little technical error and all the rest was so sexy and funny !
Wow , it was good to laugh so much ( last time I did I think it was with "Conjugating Jake"...)
Thank you so much !!!
Mireille.

[smiles_a_lot]

Thanks so much for absolving me of the condom fiasco. I have no idea how that got past me. Anyways, glad it didn't lessen your enjoyment. Writing dialogue is my favourite thing, as you can see, so it makes me really happy to know people like what I come up with.
Sam wasn't even in this concept but kind of wrote himself in there and now it looks like he's going to be around for all three parts. Warms my heart to know you laughed so much. Thanks also for mentioning CJ, oh yes, the Cosmo Quiz!!! xx Em

[liseron]

Honestly , I don't understand why people would care for a little error lost in the middle of such a wonderful and incredibly funny Story .It would be mean !
I reread it two times today and so far it's my absolute favorite :) ( and no , I didn't tell that to all the authors lol )
I admit that I love humour and fun , and I know how funny dialogues are really hard to write .
It's a gift , and obviously you got it !:)
Look really forward to see more Sam (lol!)
And Heath and his cosmo quizz in C.J...*sigh*
I couldn't rerad this now , too painful .

Thanks again!! Mireille.

[smiles_a_lot]

Wow. I've made it to "favourite". *preens* Quickly, about Heath. It hits me while I'm writing. Like, I'll write a phrase like, "I came so hard, I thought I was going to die." And I'd have to change it because it felt wrong and raw and just too soon to say stuff like that. However, this whole LoveFest has been such a boost, I think it's lead to a lot of healing. I hope so, anyways. Off to the library!!