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Jul 19, 2007 14:59

Lee walked through the dimly lit rooms of the Prometheus. A watcher might have thought him to be lost in his own thoughts, but in reality his every sense was on high alert, braced for signs of attack. He hadn’t made any effort to hide his arrival, and a response would come sooner or later.

Whatever happened though, he was going to get Shevon and ( Read more... )

bsg fic - starting over

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ez_as_pi July 19 2007, 14:54:33 UTC

OH!!!!! So good! I think Zak is getting his 'doofus' label rescinded for the moment... on probation to speak..

Love the shrink...

And Lee... *hugs* *pats him on the head*

must.go.read.again... (frak work!)

suffolkgirl July 20 2007, 19:41:07 UTC

I think Zak is getting his 'doofus' label rescinded for the moment... on probation to speak..

LOL...I'll warn him for the next chapter!

Glad you like the shrink, new characters are always awkward.

(frak work!)

That's the spirit! :) Glad you enjoyed.

zommbie1 July 19 2007, 15:46:02 UTC

Wow!!!!

That was a really good installment despite the lack of pilot loving. They will get to it soon right?

suffolkgirl July 20 2007, 19:44:02 UTC

That was a really good installment despite the lack of pilot loving. They will get to it soon right?

Depends what you mean by soon. :) After all, they have two obstacles a)Zak and b)the fact that they're both emotional screw-ups.

But the next chapter covers 'Scar', so there is pilot loving of some description.

mlsky July 19 2007, 15:51:08 UTC

Oh wow. This is an excellent resolution. Having Zak as back-up worked perfectly.

I love the end...especially this:

He supposed he didn’t blame her, not really. She’d used him, but then he’d been using her right back.

In a way, he was grateful for the reminder, that even what seemed to be the simplest of relationships came with strings attached that could get you into trouble.

I think that sums things up to a 'T' and shows that as much as Lee wants to...he just doesn't do simple.

I can see how this would have been a hard one to write and weave canon in...you really did a wonderful job.

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

suffolkgirl July 20 2007, 19:48:26 UTC

Thanks for your comments on both parts, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and thought the changes to the canon plot worked, because I did struggle with this one.

I think that sums things up to a 'T' and shows that as much as Lee wants to...he just doesn't do simple.

No, he's certainly not simple. :) Unfortunately this whole experience has just reinforced his tendency to avoid close relationships.

phdelicious July 19 2007, 16:16:47 UTC

Oooh, good way to work around canon. I like your psychologist.

He’d take heed of the lesson. It was much better just to be alone.

Awww! *huggles Lee*

suffolkgirl July 20 2007, 19:50:48 UTC

Glad you like the shrink, new characters are always awkward to introduce.
Go on and hug Lee, I think he needs it!

phdelicious July 20 2007, 19:53:58 UTC

Well, now that I have permission... ;-)

*tackle hugs poor Lee and rolls around a bit on the floor with him*

helen_c July 19 2007, 19:28:48 UTC

Lee’s mouth twisted. “If by ‘voluntarily’ you mean ‘because my father backed me into a corner’, then yes.”
Love it--and love the whole scene with the therapist. Once upon a time, I studied psychology, and while I was more into human resources management, I know enough about PTSD to know that your therapist (and Lee) both sound very believable.

but this…this sounded sensible. Logical, even.
Hee.
Only Lee...

Oh, and I loved the backstory about why Lee became a pilot, as well...

Something warmed inside Zak at the words. Was that his father’s way of saying that the mutiny incident was firmly in the past, that all was well between them again? It felt like it.
Nice. I keep thinking that if Bill had had that discussion with Lee, it would have ended badly and they would have ended up misunderstanding one another, but Zak seems better at reading between the lines.
That said, looks like Lee might have learned a thing or two, considering the talk where his father asks how the sessions are going.

“No, it’s not,” she said ( ... )

suffolkgirl July 20 2007, 19:59:59 UTC

your therapist (and Lee) both sound very believable.

Oh thanks. Not having any experience of this area myself, that's reassuring.

Nice. I keep thinking that if Bill had had that discussion with Lee, it would have ended badly and they would have ended up misunderstanding one another, but Zak seems better at reading between the lines.

Well yeah, but then in this AU Zak has ten years experience of dealing with his father (and of dealing with him as an adult) which Lee doesn't, and I think that makes a difference.
Plus I think this Lee has such a chip on his shoulder when it comes to Bill that he always jumps to the worst conclusion when dealing with him.

::bangs the pilots' heads together::

You know, I have the feeling I'm going to want to do that a lot in upcoming chapters... Especially since Scar is coming up.I think you probably will - there's a point at the end of one chapter where I want to throttle them both and I wrote it! But unfortunately that's how the characters are - complete emotional idiots when it comes to each ( ... )

helen_c July 21 2007, 07:15:00 UTC

Oh thanks. Not having any experience of this area myself, that's reassuring.
Don't worry, you're doing fine, IMHO. I wouldn't be able to analyze someone suffering from PTSD or panic attacks, of course, but I know enough to know what's plausible and what's not... (I tend to remember TWW episode Noel when I need to write a character with PTSD, actually. If that helps, lol)

Sorry, afraid not.
*pouts*
Ah, well, I'll wait... And get ready to lock our pilots in a closet, considering what's next. :D