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sunrize83

Fic: O Holy Night

Dec 27, 2006 14:47

O Holy Night (1/4)
By Sunrize83

Rating: GEN, PG-13
Characters: Sam, Dean
Description: Sam knew the truth, and the burden of it was becoming more than he could bear. Dean wasn't the one who should have died.
Author's note: Many thanks to iamstealthyone for beta. This fic was written for spn_christmas combining two prompts: An "It's a Wonderful Life" takeoff where Sam sees ( Read more... )

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Comments 34

anonymous December 27 2006, 21:53:09 UTC

Good story so far.Update soon.I love this version so far.It's not often where you see an AU where Mary slips into a deep depression and kills herself.Poor Dean ended up losing his mother and brother.

sunrize83 December 28 2006, 05:14:19 UTC

This was more difficult that I anticipated when I accepted the prompts. It's not easy to think how things might have been worse when they're already pretty bad! I'm glad you like what you've seen so far. Thanks for the feedback.

unhobbityhobbit December 27 2006, 21:54:16 UTC

I eagerly await part 2. The emotions in this fic are all just right and Sam watching his family fall apart more than he ever thought possible is just so painful. Really pulling on my heartstrings. Lovely.

sunrize83 December 28 2006, 05:16:00 UTC

Thank you so much. I'm glad the emotions ring true, because emotion is really the centerpiece of this fic. I'm happy I've tugged those heartstrings. :)

ewanspotter December 27 2006, 22:18:09 UTC

Eep! Well, that's not pleasant.

Can't wait for more! Great job so far.

sunrize83 December 28 2006, 05:16:22 UTC

Thanks! More soon, I promise.

embroiderama December 27 2006, 22:43:57 UTC

Oh, wow. The image of Sam keeping John's shirt and taking it out to grive when Dean's not there--so poignant. I really like seeing alternate ways things could have turned out, so I'm looking forward to seeing more.

sunrize83 December 28 2006, 05:17:13 UTC

I'm so glad you specifically mentioned the bit about the shirt. That was an image that really stuck in my mind as I was writing this. Thanks so much for your feedback. More very soon.

iamstealthyone December 28 2006, 00:54:53 UTC

Great opening chapter, dear! So much lovely angst for all of the Winchesters. I like that Mary's the one who's showing Sam how important it is that he lived through the fire.

My favorite part is Sam keeping John's shirt. That's just such a powerful image/revelation. I also think you did a great job showing John and Mary's argument.

Favorite lines:

'Twas the night before Christmas and all through the house not a creature was stirring...

Well. Except Sam.

Great opening. *g*

except for one flannel shirt that Sam had tucked in the bottom of his duffel. He'd pull it out sometimes, eyes burning, and inhale the faint scent of gun oil and aftershave, the worn material soft under his fingertips.

I love this. Love, love, love. I love that Sam saved this shirt. I love the details about how it smells and feels. I love that he only takes it out when Dean won’t see. Oh, Sam. *hugs him*

Bobby's backyard was little more than scrubby grass and weeds with a dilapidated wooden picnic table and a rusted-out gas grill. The table wobbled and ( ... )

sunrize83 December 28 2006, 05:19:18 UTC

Aw. *hugs you* I feel like a broken record, but your feedback... Well, you know. Smiling over here. :) This has turned out to be a tougher task than I thought it would be, so your encouragement is greatly appreciated! Thanks for polishing this up so it's shiny. (Yes, that was a veiled Firefly reference.)

iamstealthyone December 28 2006, 05:26:29 UTC

Aw. *hugs you* I feel like a broken record, but your feedback... Well, you know. Smiling over here.

*hugs you back* You're welcome. It's always a pleasure to read and comment on your stories. :)

Thanks for polishing this up so it's shiny.

Glad I could help, although it was plenty shiny before the beta. :)