Comments | thylaslain: [FIC] Push and Pull

thylaslain

[FIC] Push and Pull - OneShot

Jul 03, 2005 01:39

Push and Pull
Overall rating: R

Summary: It's like all those lies and truths are lying in bed with you...

SPOILERS: None
Pairing: Uchiha Sasuke x Uzumaki Naruto
Disclaimer: Naruto and all related characters (c) Masashi Kishimoto -- i.e. They are not mine.

( Perhaps it's one lie after another. )

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Comments 15

7mharris July 3 2005, 00:50:25 UTC

The stlye is beautiful, and the ending is amazingly striking! I just love that ending! Good job.

thylaslain July 3 2005, 08:56:55 UTC

Thank you so much for both your comments. :D THey're highly appreciated. I'm real glad you liked it.

permanentwhite July 3 2005, 02:40:13 UTC

i love your words.... this whole fic just seems very whole and all-encompassing. i don't have the right words for it, but i really like it.

thylaslain July 3 2005, 08:57:44 UTC

n_n Thanks. I'm thinking of making a sequel-ish type thing. Even if I Did say it was a one shot. lol.

youji_yola July 3 2005, 02:56:02 UTC

I was kind of confused on who was talking (maybe still is) but I liked it. Sweet that you pointed out the fact that they gravitate towards each other but there are things that keep them apart. Keep up the giid work!

thylaslain July 3 2005, 08:58:39 UTC

It was Naruto.
"Eyes, dark and shadowed by hair just as dark are boring into yours. Yet for all their intensity you can see the thousand and one doubts and fears all making the dark eyes darker."

I wrote that to show "you" was naruto and that he was with Sasuke.

neome21 July 3 2005, 04:22:25 UTC

wow, i have to say, having it written out like that all in feelings and not just in description was amazing. The descriptions especially of their skin being the only thing that separated them... wow. And it all felt very in character as well. It was poignant but also made sure to put in some of the imperfections that are part of any relationship, especially one between those two. Good job! Thanks for writing it! :: adds link to her favorites list ::

thylaslain July 3 2005, 09:06:09 UTC

:glomp: you made my day!!! ^^

I wanted to write Sasuke and Naruto's possible first time together. I highly doubted that it would be all peaches and cream...And I didn't see them cuddling afterwards either. lol. Well not this time at least.

There are other fics for that. lol.

Thank you so much for you comment, I highly appreciate it; and thanks for adding it. It's an honour.

peridots13 July 3 2005, 04:31:37 UTC

Wow. Wow. Just...wow. That was awesome. Really well written. I like the style of it. Very good.