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toyakoya

My Fanfic - Viewfinder

Oct 14, 2009 23:01

Hong Kong is very similar to Tokyo. Sometimes, when he’s standing in the heart of Shinjuku, he would look up and the skyscrapers, neon lights, and oversized billboards would blur together. The push-and-shove of people, milling and aimless, focused and hurried, moved around him and bumped past him; he felt like a tiny, ( Read more... )

my fanfic - yamane ayano

Comments 54

5123 October 15 2009, 20:38:56 UTC

great job!!! i love it!!! more please!!

toyakoya October 16 2009, 04:14:47 UTC

Lol, I'm loving the conciseness. Thank you for the comment =)

nice lizabon October 15 2009, 20:48:49 UTC

"I can`t"
finally he said it. i`m wondering what is asami thinking. he`s usually so perceptive. but maybe he is, but he wants akihito to tell the truth. will you write asmi`s POV?
I really like your style and I`ve been waiting for someone to write that in spite of aki`s infatuation with asami he is capable of saying " he can`t".

Re: nice toyakoya October 16 2009, 04:16:19 UTC

Mmm, Asami's POV, I'll admit that it's tempting -- the major block is that it would probably be fairly difficult to write. He's such a wonderful character but I'll a little daunted by the thought of trying to scurry around in his head. *katana*

I'm glad that I you enjoyed the story ^_^

Re: nice toyakoya October 16 2009, 04:16:42 UTC

That should be .. "I'm a little" *dies*

ca11iope October 16 2009, 00:08:36 UTC

This is very intense. I think you did a really good job getting into Akihito's head as he tries to deal with what he went through, and is still going through. Very edgy sex, too. Thanks for sharing this.

toyakoya October 16 2009, 04:18:52 UTC

Thank you for the comment! =D
It's flattering to know that the characterization wasn't too bad (and that the sex wasn't bad either!) hahaha. =)

queenmirror October 16 2009, 02:03:41 UTC

Wow, just wow... That was amazing. You describe the feelings of Takaba acutely and the actions are great as the dialogues, all is well-balanced... That is beautiful. The only thing I have to say is « why there isn't a sequel» ^^? I really liked this story and I'm curious about what happens next. but anyway, you did a wonderful job, Bravo!!

(pardon my engrish ^^;)

toyakoya October 16 2009, 04:20:27 UTC

Thanks for the comment! =)

This is meant to be a stand-alone, but I suppose it's not impossible? Haha, I'll probably write other Viewfinder fics first though.

(I think your engrish is fabulous ^^)

queenmirror October 16 2009, 21:54:21 UTC

Lool!!! That is great then, I'm looking forward to more of your works ! :D
Have a nice day!

mgx2 October 16 2009, 03:15:45 UTC

this's a nice fic I like it!
but the end tells there will be another part..am I wrong?
I wish I could be right XD

toyakoya October 16 2009, 04:21:14 UTC

Thanks for the comment; I'm glad you like it!

Well, I don't know about a sequal, I'll probably write other Viewfinder fics first.