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When All Logic Grows Cold

Nov 22, 2008 12:01

When All Logic Grows Cold

Word Count: ~3000
Characters: Dean/Charlotte (Het)
Rating: NC-17
Feedback: Concrit is always welcome.
Disclaimer: The Winchester boys aren't mine but I'd make Dean wear his boots all of the time if they were.
Spoilers/Warnings: None. Takes place in an existing 'verse. I think it works as a stand-alone piece ( Read more... )

genre: het, genre: au, rating: nc-17, pairing: dean/ofc, series: strange angels

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Re: wherein you reduce *me* to a pile of goo elanurel November 23 2008, 20:18:29 UTC

One may have the thought that Charlotte likes making little inconsequential foibles

One could potentially be correct. I do think she makes enough mistakes just being Charlotte that this is probably not the case. Though I couldn't see the post-hunt sex being anything but urgent, and I kinda dug the bondage undertones.

I swear I lost consciousness with that one.

It was something I almost took out, along with the whole conversation about him watching her while they're screwing. But, you know, I figured why not go there with the dirty? Since we know I can't write PWP, we're good. ;)

I really loved this. I'm ever so glad I had the guts to tell you the bunny to start with. :D

Which makes me happier than I can say.

*twirls you*

lastwordslinger November 22 2008, 20:12:58 UTC

Hey, my first reading of one of your fics! And it was awesomely worth it!

First off, Cthulhu FTW. I think the boys need to fight some Cthulhu-end-times cultists, if not a monster itself. Just because. ;)

Secondly, HAWT! Beautifully described and just plain great. Heeeeee, naughty Dean. That is love.

I definitely need to read more, but this was wonderful! :D

elanurel November 23 2008, 20:20:06 UTC

*is blushing*

I have always wanted to write a Cthulhu-based story (though I've heard of others, I've not seen them when I search for them) but this 'verse is so well-defined that Cthulhu wouldn't fit.

Beautifully described and just plain great. Heeeeee, naughty Dean. That is love.

Thank you. I rather like their dynamic as a couple.

starpixie16 November 22 2008, 23:34:00 UTC

This was awesome! Dean getting covered head to toe in giant bug guts was classic! *lol*

I always love the quiet "chick flick" moments between Dean and Charlotte ... so lovely.

And even though his appearance was brief, my heart still broke for poor Joe. With only a few sentences, you managed to make a peripheral character into a touchingly sympathetic human being.

elanurel November 23 2008, 20:24:35 UTC

This was awesome! Dean getting covered head to toe in giant bug guts was classic!

*twirls you*

I had to go there with the giant bugs. I wanted the whole blow-up to be about something funny versus life threatening.

I always love the quiet "chick flick" moments between Dean and Charlotte ... so lovely.

*is blushing*

I'm trying hard to keep him true to character while letting him be a little emotional...

And even though his appearance was brief, my heart still broke for poor Joe.

Thank you so much for picking up on that detail. I think that's why I love writing Charlotte POV so much. Because of her gift, she gets unique insight into people that makes passing characters more interesting.

*twirls you again*

*pets the pretty, pretty story* katelennon November 23 2008, 02:17:55 UTC

Oh, you little thing; how I've missed Dean and Charlotte. Nice to know they're doing what they do best- driving each other to distraction.
Whee!!!!!! I got food poisoning yesterday and this makes today suck much, much less.

I will NEVER eat spinach cheese bread from Glass Nickel EVER again. EVER EVER EVER.

Re: *pets the pretty, pretty story* geekgirl33 November 23 2008, 05:07:58 UTC

Damn girl I was just thinking about that just now about how good that would be. Only I'd get sick from the fat content.

Re: *pets the pretty, pretty story* elanurel November 23 2008, 20:51:12 UTC

I only eat spinach now because Kate makes me and I'm still anemic. ;)

Re: *pets the pretty, pretty story* elanurel November 23 2008, 20:43:21 UTC

Nice to know they're doing what they do best- driving each other to distraction.

And the sex. Mustn't forget about that. ;)

I'm sorry you've got food poisoning. That is truly the suck. I hope this made up for it a little.

bug spray quirkies November 23 2008, 03:22:14 UTC

this is awesome-r! don't know how you do it boo! this is wonderful dean/charlotte. you inspired me to re-read SA and now i think this look at them is even cooler because it feels exactly how i would imagine their relationship would develop (except hotter because your imagination is so much more interesting than mine) - dean is still being an ass sometimes and they're wonderfully snarky and have explosive chemistry and so much love.

Re: bug spray elanurel November 23 2008, 20:46:38 UTC

*is blushing*

I just changed a couple of things - added in some moments of Charlotte using her empathy - but it's 95% unchanged based on what you beta'd.

dean is still being an ass sometimes and they're wonderfully snarky and have explosive chemistry and so much love.

Well, I imagine he would be that pissed off if someone screwed up and the fact that we've seen him call Sam on stuff like that, I could totally see him doing the same with Charlotte.

I did like the fact that she feels so comfortable with him that she just lets herself go. I never thought she'd ever do that as a character.