Writing Style!

[xypnise]

      So what I wanted to ask here in a post is what you think of my writing style. I basically would just like some feedback (for whomever is actually reading my original story) on what you think of it. Is it too descriptive? Not descriptive enough? Too long per chapter? Too short per chapter? Too long between chapters to be released? (I've been

Comments

[serenitytouched]

I'd say your chapters are too short right now. I personally shoot for 4-5k+ words on average for mine, and usually end up with 7-8k at most. Kind of just depends on what's happening. I set that limit for myself so I'm not cutting myself off short in gaining momentum in the chapter.

How you're writing isn't bad. It's clear and I understand the dialogue/general emotions so far.

I recommend joining LJ groups to find more feedback as well as perhaps joining fictionpress (I've never personally used it, but I know it's a branch from fanfiction.net for original fiction).

Writing Style! - R1

[xypnise]

Mm, my brother told me the same thing about my chapters being too short. I guess they are, but I didn't really cut them short purposely-rather that I felt it was a good stopping point to separate different ideas, events or maybe even fictional days? ::shrug::
But I can see where you both are coming from. Just more content perhaps?

I'm glad my style seems to be okay.

How can I specifically join a LJ group? I mean, I have no clue how to search for things on here. Besides that, people just accept you randomly? It's not as a closed friendship circle thing? Or more like deviantART? o.0

I don't think I'll be joining any other site. I feel like this is as far as I'd like to go with it aside from hosting it on my own personal site. I honestly want to keep it in just a couple locations, but to still get decent feedback.

Re: Writing Style! - R1

[serenitytouched]

It's a matter of adding more detail and dialog, I suppose. It depends what's happening or what the scene should be about. For right now, I feel like you could add more than what you have so far chapter wise

[ofthegrey]

I think you have a good balance of descriptive grammar vs. elements that propel the storyline/conversation. Sometimes I struggle with having too much description.

I think so far you have a good start. You've laid the framework for characters involved, and you've prepared the reader for the content of the story (the pageant).

My only feeling thus far is perhaps the characters lack a little depth. That could simply be because you've only written two chapters and you haven't gotten to it yet. I think I saw you say somewhere that this story wasn't going to have any action or dramatic plots, and that's fine, but you can still incorporate flaws into the characters without having drama. Without flaws, they seem one-dimensional.

Also, I agree with Chrystal that the chapters are too short. I struggle with that too.