소녀, 사랑을 찾아봐 [haesica, hyohyuk, hyosica, R]

[dalpaengee]

Title: 소녀, 사랑을 찾아봐
Pairing: HaeSica, HyoHyuk, HyoSica
Rating: R
Summary: Jessica tries to find love and gets lost in the process. (Sort of AU follow-up to 소녀, 사랑을 만나다Note: I wrote this for my creative writing class, again. I wanted to write something about a girl lost in love, and I was particularly interested in doing it about a Korean girl

Comments

[dalpaengee]

im...sorry?

hes not an asshole, he just does realize or something idk...jessica just doesnt love him enough
SO WHO DO YOU WANT HER TO DATE OMG whateva

ty ty bb. i forced you because i was greedy for feedback/anxious/whatever/you know what i meannnnnn and im really glad you liked it and i hope my teacher likes it but shes a bit of a bitch anyway so whatever. and ty again ilu

[dalpaengee]

thats what koreans DO bc they dont have anywhere else to fuck. OR WOULD YOU RATHER THEY DO IT IN A DVDBANG?
you are not being specific enough tyvm

can you cunt punch her anyway? she kind of annoys me :|

[bestlies]

This is absolutely gorgeous. I love the feel of it and everything that happens. It flows so well and it works together magically. It's really great and I'm so glad that you wrote it - especially with Jessica as the lead. This was great. I think there was one grammar mistake, but other than that, it's great.

[dalpaengee]

oh crap, i'll have to look over it again. unless you remember where it was?
but thanks so much for the comment! i'm really glad you liked it and to hear that it came across well and had the right effect :)

[bestlies]

Um, I think I do. /looks
Actually, I can't find it, sorry. I just remember that it said "a" when it needed to be "and". Sorry.
You're welcome. It really was great and I was happy to have read it. Your writing is always gorgeous.

[dalpaengee]

thanks for looking again anyway! i'll give it another look over.
and that's really too flattering, but thank you so much, i really appreciate it and i'll keep writing and posting stuff here!

[dalpaengee]

LOL LAME COMMENT BRE. but thank you for it anyway.

hae isnt non-precious on purpose he is just not what sica wants :(

I think I died a little inside.

[vickleness]

LEAVE JESSICA ALONE! Or not, because it's just sinful-fun messing around with her character. But yeah, I can see Tiffany as well in this ficlet because of her background and struggles with the adjustment to change yet her more bubbly personality would conflict the direction of the story but at the same time, she's been emo-ish lately. But, I have a sica!bias, so I would be more incline to say that she is indeed suitable.

It's just like, a chain of unfortunate events that happens in a social and emotional level. Finding out possible the male interest is limited, the adjustment to a new environment that drops the bomb of culture shock even though one's background is associated, and then finding a possible candidate, but witness the naughty.

Love...is hard, and shouldn't be forceful. But yeah...just wooow. The kid can't catch a break in life.

Awkward comments are awkward. Pardon.

Re: I think I died a little inside.

[dalpaengee]

I thought about using Tiffany, but then I love HyoSica and I also thought that Jessica fit the somber mood a little better, too. ^^ I'm really glad you liked it and thanks so much for the comment!

[keychains]

i never never been so up and down all in the space of one fic DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD:

askjdlas jessica, your jessica is so so so so so so so so perfect omg ;~; she's so precious and just trying to fit in and i want to hug her close ajsdklas.

AND HYOYEON. she was so cool idgi idgi i love her and i was 8DDD about hyohyuk then DDD8 because of jessica and damnit, i actually wanted hyosica more than i wanted hyohyuk by the end, wtf is up with that?

i blame your incredible writing and it's powers of persuasion.

"...Hyoyeon’s cheeks. They are soft and round..."
I WANT TO SQUISH SO BADLY ;~;

She hates herself when she can’t find the word in English to describe how she feels. It’s just 답답해.
i know this feeling :\

and ajkdl okay, the haesica broke my heart a little too. donghae is such a boy, and i wanted to rage at him but i couldn't cause it wasn't even like he did anything wrong, but jessica ;~;

she smiles afterwards and waits for him to turn away before wiping the spit off her mouth. She holds his hand as the walk back to the pool and

[dalpaengee]

:'D I'm glad you liked it baby. I knew you would, haha. I love HyoSica and HyoHyuk and HaeSica so I know, I kind of made them all angsty and sad, each and every one of them, but it just didn't feel right to have a happy ending.

And the 답답해 thing....ugh that happens to me in real life. like how bad is it that we dont have a correct word for that in english? like...we have those three words that i used in the footnote, but theres really no one word to tie in all those feelings together and it's a feeling that is unfortunately felt too often, you know.

I have a few more things I can post that I wrote for this class, but they're not fic, but I want you to read them anyway ;~; I'll post them later once I've edited them, because I have to do that for my final portfolio anyway.

love you baby ♥