Welcome to the Real Park

[ender_williams]

My friend and I are in the park, the park is always beautiful if you know where to look and what to look at. I decided to ask my friend if he thought so too. So I said

Comments

lets make things awkward

[anonymous]

don't get conceited love.
Your last entry was stunning but this...its just too obvious. Uncertainty can be a powerful driving force in life.
It is, however,quite difficult to be shaken when you know the ending,and even more so when the path taken to reach that ending is straight and thin as a razor blade.

you can do better

Re: lets make things awkward

[20_7]

this was meant to be a message, not a great piece. obviously you don't realize the subtleties. sigh

Re: lets make things awkward

[anonymous]

there are no subtleties to realize, that was my point.

Re: lets make things awkward

[20_7]

well then i must say you are a narrow minded reader. look at the metaphors, the wordplay. sure, it's written simply, but if you are one for flowery lagnuage and striking words, this isnt the journal for you. This can be interpreted so many ways, and you've just chosen to see the surface of it.

leave your name please, and i'll prove that you know nothing of writing

[honestconscious]

There's so much that can be learned and looked at from this one entry. It's amazing how so many different people get different reactions to the entries. Very nice writing.

[20_7]

so please tell me HC, what did YOU get from this piece? i'd really like to know. you don't have to, i'm just wondering if your steadfast enough in your comments that you can back it up.

[honestconscious]

I personally got what a lot of other people go from this entry. If you are told what to think is beautiful for so long, then it's hard to see other things being beautiful. It might, "irraitate your eyes." It's always hard to go against what others say and do. And when you've thought something for so long it's very difficult to change it.

[20_7]

i see, exactly what is stated in almost the same words of the entry. i look forward to reading whatever else you write

[1tinkerbell6]

teddy i dont know if you remember me but i have been reading your journal and i find all your writting just sooo wonderful and it really makes me think and i like that....i cant wait to see what else you write.....
-kristin-

[ender_williams]

thank you...

Lake water

[forgetmenot42]

Hey! You wrote this on my birthday!
So, Teddy, how are you feeling now that you have drinkin that delicious water? Good, eh?
Hey, if you ever wanna talk or anything, my sn is orangesky42.
Amber

Re: Lake water

[__demosthenes]

Well well, it seems we have another writer. Allow me to tell you about your journal. This is mature beyond the thoughts of many other kids. Yet, it lacks color in parts. It runs smoothly, and then cuts off roughly. I feel like sometimes your words are too set. Play around with them. You are a.. insightful writer, nontheless. I will continue my reading if you don't mind.

Re: Lake water

[__nietzsche]

true...very true...it does lack a certain color, and it's nothing ground breaking...but keep at it.

Re: Lake water

[ender_williams]

i see...i guess i mean, that hurts yes...but i guess i need more of that. Although some of your comments are obscure such as "lacking color" i'm afraid i dont quite understand what you're getting at there...but i'll listen to you...even if i dont know who you are or exactly what you're saying.

Caring is Creepy

[kellyflogue]

More like "A Lack of Color"!!!!!

Are Frank and I the only ones who see it..?

Teddy, you're amazing. I haven't seen one writing where I've thought anything bad about it. Continue as you were..

K.f.L