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PotC Drabble: Passings

Jan 26, 2009 02:18

Title: Passings
Author: Obfusc8er
Word Count: 100
Rating: G
Warnings: Angst (Hey, it's me.)
Written for hseas_challenge.
Challenge Number: 1 - Film Interpretation
Summary: Something is lost in the reach between worlds.

( Sail the trackless seas )

potc fanfiction

Comments 23

awickedwench January 27 2009, 02:38:16 UTC

This was so poignant & well written. Good job!

obfusc8er January 27 2009, 06:21:12 UTC

Thank you much. :D

djarum99 January 27 2009, 05:18:18 UTC

Oh, this is wonderful. Please don't take this the wrong the way, but...this is quintessential J/E :-)

Jack resenting his good man's inclinations, seeing her so clearly and in this moment, himself.

All he need do is give life to her delusion...

And he can't, because he can't give life to his own.

Glorious angst, every word razor-edged and such a precise portrait of both of them in that moment. Brava, and thank you so much for writing this ♥

obfusc8er January 27 2009, 06:38:41 UTC

Please don't take this the wrong the way, but...this is quintessential J/E :-)

LOL Nothing taken the wrong way. Happy you liked it. :D

And he can't, because he can't give life to his own.

Indeed. To me, Jack looks really reluctant, almost sick, about telling her the truth. And yet he does. Even without trying to hurt her, he has. That scene is just angst candy.

Thanks for the wonderful feedback.

djarum99 January 27 2009, 06:50:30 UTC

Jack looks really reluctant, almost sick, about telling her the truth. And yet he does. Even without trying to hurt her, he has

Yes, and yes, and yes. *sigh*

Sorry.

The look on his face, that terrible raw gentleness in his voice - angst candy of the finest kind, and you've truly done it justice ♥

obfusc8er January 27 2009, 10:20:28 UTC

Yes, and yes, and yes. *sigh*

LOL Very dramatic, that.

Thanks again for the aiding and abetting encouragement and comments. :D

cmgacrux January 27 2009, 13:30:54 UTC

Beautiful work. Thank you so much for writing it. ♥

obfusc8er January 27 2009, 19:47:11 UTC

Thanks for reading it. Hope to be able to give you more than a drabble someday.

salr323 January 27 2009, 23:24:17 UTC

Oh that's perfect! I'd never imagined that he might let her jump, and find his revenge in it, but the idea is perfect. Ah, but of course he can't do it because he's a good man after all.

Wonderful. :)

obfusc8er January 28 2009, 08:24:34 UTC

he might let her jump, and find his revenge in it

I don't think Liz would have required much prodding to take that leap, and Jack can be very persuasive. It was a golden opportunity for revenge, and I have to think it tantalized him just a bit.

Glad the idea worked for you. And thanks for the comments!

whensheflies January 28 2009, 07:09:58 UTC

Gorgeous. So much said in so few words. Bravo.

obfusc8er January 28 2009, 08:25:16 UTC

Thank you. :D