TRANSLATIONS, Part IV. -- Переводы, Часть IV.

[origa]

TRANSLATIONS, Part I ,  TRANSLATIONS, Part II , TRANSLATIONS, Part III

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The last few poems... -- Последние не вошли в пост...

[origa]

full gallop во всю силу галоп
for a moment I let go на мгновенье забываю
of my mind про всё на свете

face to face лицом к лицу
with a soaring eagle с парящим орлом
limitless sky бескрайнее небо

unbound свободное
a horse neigh carried разносится ветром
by the wind конское ржанье

Annie Juhl, Denmark Эни Джюл, Данияbroken barrier разрушен барьер

Re: The last few poems... -- Последние не вошли в пост...

[origa]

В третьем хайку Эни Джюл, в русском варианте -- в первой строке следует читать "свободен". Сорьки, сейчас только заметила :)

свободен
разносится ветром
конское ржанье

[martin51144]

My favorite poem in the Translations of Part Four

rising high
over the river and mountains
my last breath

Sasa Vazic, Serbia

[origa]

Thanks, Martin! Did you read Stefan's comemnt about this haiku? (below)

[martin51144]

Good point but I saw it as a spirit. Perhaps not a haiku. I wonder what Sasa thinks? Anyways, I enjoyed it very much!

[origa]

You are a very perceptive reader, I would say :)

[dr_wg]

Вот здесь заметил опечатки:

больше сеья
больше всего на свете
мечта мустанга

прямо вверх
прыжок в кустоту -
свобода и любовь

[origa]

Спасибо, поправила.

[stefan11]

Some of my favorites in this set.
summer breeze …
the working horse turns
into Pegasus

Hana Nestieva, Israel

Very nice!
untethered summer day
the mustang and I
not so different

Darrell Lindsey, USA

!!
slow ascent
horse ranch gets smaller
birds bigger

Charlie Smith, USA

very nice.
rising high
over the river and mountains
my last breath

Sasa Vazic, Serbia

Very interesting. But, if it is the author's "last" breath, who is writing this haiku? (So, maybe just breath, without "last"?)
full gallop
for a moment I let go
of my mind

Annie Juhl, Denmark

An awesome haiku! And one body and mind are let go, that is freedom!

[origa]

Thanks, Stefan! I would probably agree with all this :)

many thanks

[stefan11]

many thanks for your kind words.
cheers, charlie

[ersh1_1]

Thank you, dear Stefan, for complimenting my ku.

Favorites from Part IV

[kathyunguyen]

summer breeze ...
the working horse turns
into Pegasus

***

untethered summer day
the mustang and I
not so different

***

no tethers
on earth or sky ...
summer breeze

***

letting go
of the earth ...
hooves and feathers

***

full gallop
for a moment I let go
of my mind

Re: Favorites from Part IV

[origa]

Thanks for these ones too, Kathy!

Re: Favorites from Part IV

[kathyunguyen]

You're welcome! :)

The last 2 I felt don't have a summer kigo (unless if I'm mistaken?), but they are just too wonderfully well-written... I liked them!

Thanks, Origa for this wonderful contest! I always learn from these contests in that there are so many ways to write a haiku/senryu. :)

Re: Favorites from Part IV

[origa]

You are very welcome, Kathy :)

Yes, so many ways... The only requirement is, be true to your own heart.