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Taking Back Sunday -- Chapter 13

Aug 11, 2007 11:47

[Title] Taking Back Sunday
[Author] dejectedmadness
[Rating] FINALLY NC-17 for boykissing/touching/sexual contact/boysecks!!!
[Chapter Listing] .:1:. .:2:. .:3:. .:4:. .:5:. .:6:. .:7:. .:8:. .:9:. .:10:. .:11:. .:12:. 13/?
[Disclaimer] I am posting fanFICTION. Neither the characters nor the ideas belong to me, just the plot specific to this story. No profit is ( Read more... )

Comments 14

mandlebars August 11 2007, 19:12:35 UTC

I missed the last chapter, I really love this fic, it's real if that makes sense

dejectedmadness August 24 2007, 13:41:43 UTC

All the chapters are listed, so it should be ok to have missed one or two, you can just go back and read them whenever. They're also mostly on my archive lj kristelflindall, although I really need to go and update that. I will probably do that today, or if not today soon. So you can go back and read missed chapters whenever you want.

And actually, that does make sense, and it feels really good to have a comment like that. I know that often good stories, sexy stories, entertaining stories, they are not always very realistic, but you read them anyway. That this one is real makes me feel very good. I try to make the story as tactile as I can.

Thanks for reading!

wakexthedead August 11 2007, 20:01:18 UTC

Corey spared a tentative smile. “He broke your heart?” he asked. Jesse nodded. “Mine too.” I really liked this line for some reason.

“Because you’re human. Because you’re capable of feeling-”

Jesse burst out, “I wish I wasn’t!” His voice trembled, despite the force of his exclamation. And then this line reminded me of Harry Potter.

Anyways, I loved this chapter as usual and I'm sad to hear it will be ending soon.

dejectedmadness August 24 2007, 13:44:11 UTC

I actually really like the Corey + broken heart line, too. It was important, I think, to relate Jesse to Corey through Brian and I was never so successful in other chapters as this one. Thanks!

And I'm going to assume that reminding people of Harry Potter is a compliment. I <3 those books.

But yea, thanks for commenting and reading! :)

vixull August 12 2007, 01:22:09 UTC

I read this earlier, but didn't have time to comment.

Now, one would think that having all this extra time to plot out a comment would make for a pretty decent comment. Lies.
I have absoloutely nothing to say.

"John's high-pitched cry" made me laugh, though, because it was horrible exaggerated in my head.

Well done! If I were on MSN right now, I would type (y).

dejectedmadness August 24 2007, 13:46:05 UTC

Woo for (y). Thanks! That makes my heart smile.

And John and his high-pitched cry? Could definitely be exaggerated, given how dramatic John can be sometimes haha. He's adorable.

I sometimes think that the best comments are the ones that say you have no words. Thanks!

i_amjackscolon August 13 2007, 06:54:55 UTC

you...are amazing. =]

dejectedmadness August 24 2007, 13:46:31 UTC

Thanks!

x_missdarko_x August 20 2007, 00:06:04 UTC

I still don't know wether to be sad Brian and Jesse are over, or to be glad that maybe John will get his chance now. I do know I wanna hug Jes because he's breaking my heart. Into very little pieces. Damn you Brian, for being such a pussy.

You describe Jesse's feelings very well: the pain, the apathy, the aching and the missing. He wants to escape his loneliness, but ends up feeling lonelier than ever. And what a good friend John is, seriously, that boy needs to be praised for his patience and his comfort. He's an angel, I'm sure. Must be tough, wanting Jesse so much but knowing his best friends motives are all wrong.

Oh, this chapter was so heavenly intense and emotional! Favourite line:
Corey spared a tentative smile. “He broke your heart?” he asked. Jesse nodded. “Mine too.”Brilliant move to include Corey, I love it ( ... )

dejectedmadness August 24 2007, 13:52:40 UTC

Wow, this is the sweetest comment! I don't know what part of it to address. I get so sad to think of Jesse and Brian broken up. Jesse is so heartwrenching. He feels SO MUCH. Like he can't stop himself from feeling, and that's all he wants, so everything hurts, and he can't help it. John is brilliant because he can see past himself and see Jesse falling to pieces, and instead of being selfish, he is the best friend. He's there for Jesse and it makes him frigging so perfect. Self-denial for the satisfaction of friends ( ... )