The mother of all RP horror stories, Part XVII
Previous Parts: Day 1: I, II, III, IV, V, VI, VII, VIII, IX, X
Day 2: XI, XII, XIII, XIV, XV, XVI
So we last had Yuna's mun autoing-in ways that Rasu would oppress her character since I was so useless and uncooperative in agreeing to it myself. Because it's not like either of us should value my character being IC or anything. And then, of course, Yuna has to come out to reinforce the stereotype he hates because his logic is SUPPOSED to be confusing ;) and Let Me Show You My Ego in the form of "Look at this sexy body, you know it's sexy and I know you want it even if you're straight I JUST HAVE THAT EFFECT ON PEOPLE. Aren't you lucky for the free peep show?" Yes, that "peep show" that is in truth such a commonplace occurrence where this scene is set that it shouldn't even be a point of observation to either of them.
Hello, cultural slip, I think I can use you.
Izumiz Angel: Rasu made a mental note to check back on the secretary sometime soon and see if she was feeling any better. She seemed nice and Rasu was naturally drawn to try to help people, especially when they were nice. The room really was nice, and reminiscent of a luxurious hotel suite. There was a table with two chairs, a private bathroom, a spacious living area with a sofa and entertainment center, a small kitchenette for making coffee and holding a few snacks, a dresser with a mirror, and a large comfortable bed between two nightstands, each holding a lamp and one holding the phone. A recliner with a lamp sat in the corner. Of course there was also the surveillance system set up to one of the tv channels. The television was situated to be visible from nearly every point in the room.
He was just heading over to the bed to test out its softness when the door slid open. He found the remark quite curious. Really, what was the big deal? It was standard practice to bathe and change clothes amongst one's own gender. He was finding it increasingly difficult to take Yuna too seriously, since he seemed quite set on making snippy remarks, and that was about all he could do in Rasu's opinion. He certainly wasn't worried about Yuna hurting him.
"Are you suggesting you have something to show I've not seen before?" Rasu lifted an eyebrow with a helpless smile.
[redacted]: ( *is giggling* Yep, Yuna's a brat. )
[redacted]: ( I like how Rasu's dealing with him. XD )
I like how you're ignoring the point I made about your continued culture fail XD
[redacted]: Scowling at Rasu, Yuna put his hands on his hips. "That's not the damn point. Didn't anyone tell you what I do here?"
Baring his teeth in a mockery of a grin, Yuna stepped into Rasu's room. "A high-class whore is still a whore, don't you think? You get to have for free what most men pay damn well for."
Walking right up to the other man, Yuna paused when he was just out of reach of Rasu, eyes glaring as he looked up to meet the taller man's gaze. "Tell me, do you like what you see? Hmm?" He reached up to touch his own face lightly, then shrugged his yukata off one shoulder, exposing lighter bruises on his skin there.
"Or maybe you like someone less bruised? It's not like you'd have to ask, anyway, eh?" Taking a half step forward, he lifted his chin and set his jaw, clearly challenging Rasu to do something.
First paragraph. "That's not the damn point. Didn't anyone tell you what I do here?" Authorial inserting much? "The point is YUNA HAS ANGST AND IS ANGSTY FOR IT. Stop muddling the issue with your statements of logic."
Second paragraph. "You get to have for free"-- STOP THERE. So not only does Yuna get to presume that Rasu is gay, he gets to presume that Rasu is SEW TTLY HAWT for him that he'd throw his actual job responsibilities to the wind and take advantage of his charge instead. And boss man is going to be totes cool with him doing EXACTLY WHAT HE WAS HIRED TO KEEP OTHER PEOPLE FROM DOING. This whole premise that Rasu should want to rape Yuna that badly on sheer principle is just skeevy. And as long as we're on that phrase, Yuna was not expected to whore out, remember? By changing this around you have just unraveled the entire premise behind this scene, and the entire reason Rasu had for being there at all. WTG!
Third paragraph. Newsflash: a yukata is not a bathrobe. You cannot just shrug it off the shoulder like that if you've put it on properly.
Fourth paragraph. "IT'S NOT LIKE YOU'D HAVE TO ASK" => "CLEARLY CHALLENGING RASU TO DO SOMETHING." Be a little more subtle, mun. I dare you.
No, seriously. You're just getting desperate now. I haven't had Rasu popping a boner and drooling over Yuna's AMAZING HAWT so you're having him think, speak, (un)dress and act SEX SEX SEX. I haven't had him fall over himself worrying over his POOR LITTLE ANGST-RIDDEN SELF and what has him so MISUNDERSTOOD so you're trying to push that too with "Didn't anyone tell you what I do here? Did you miss that? Ok, try A HIGH CLASS WHORE IS STILL A WHORE. IT ISN'T LIKE YOU'D HAVE TO ASK IF YOU WANTED TO SMEX ME UP." That's the entirety of the content of this post. I AM SEXY AND ANGSTY BECAUSE OF MY SEXINESS. WANT ME, PITY ME, OR GTFO.
...And this too is a complete jump in characterization from the flippant schoolgirl beginning, the ice princess middle and the temperamental hothead ending. Now he's nothing but an obnoxious attention whore trying to sneer his way into Rasu's pants so he can turn around and whine and shriek about how much he doesn't want it.
I had to be really careful with my next post because I didn’t want to make the revulsion of this post’s content obvious, but at the same time, I wanted to call her on the contradictions.
Izumiz Angel: Rasu watched, in an amazingly silent fashion for him, as Yuna stepped in and issued his challenges. The redhead's expression shifted first to confusion, then to incredulity, and then to simple helpless amusement. He laughed weakly, but didn't take a single step back. Yuna didn't intimidate him one bit.
"One, you seem to be forgetting something-- I'm being paid to keep company with you. This isn't my choice; this is my job.... Two, bruised or not bruised, I gotta say... Do you actually think I'm going to take an interest in any kind of peep show you have to offer? You're totally not my type. I'd sooner take the secretary than you!" He laughed a bit-- because really it was meant half as a joke and half as an attempt to put Yuna at ease, since he seemed quite hissy over this idea that he'd be whoring out for free to him.
"And just hold on a second. I thought part of my job was to keep these other guys' hands off you. Now something isn't adding up here. Either you're bullshitting me about just what people are paying damn well for out of you, or your boss was bullshitting me about just what I'm supposed to be doing here. Now which is it?"
[redacted]: ( XD *snickers* )
Oh yes, I'm sure you're just tickled to death that I'm calling out another contradiction ICly-- or maybe you really don't care in the same way you haven't cared from the very beginning. FYI, if the only acknowledgment you give to people's criticisms is to laugh them off, they aren't likely to appreciate being repeatedly dismissed. That's how you end up the subject of multi-part rants like this one. Because let's be honest: if you HAD listened to me any of the numerous times I've tried to say anything, this would not have progressed anywhere close to the point it actually did, which would mean far less material to rant about.
[redacted]: As far as Yuna was concerned, Rasu could claim whatever he wanted, but bitter experience had proven that men said one thing and did another all the time. Straightening his yukata, he took a step back, though he still glared at Rasu somewhat suspiciously. Yuna was annoyed that Rasu seemed to find this amusing, but that didn't dispel his wariness.
"My boss?" Yuna laughed humorlessly, shaking his head at Rasu and giving him an incredulous look. "You don't get it, do you? Oh, whatever." Snorting quietly, he turned away and walked to the sofa, sitting on it gingerly and then turning his attention back to Rasu.
"Just what were you told, anyway?" he asked idly, carefully sitting back and arranging himself into a seemingly casual pose, though he was far from relaxed.
I'm rating Yuna's observational skills as roughly half those of a ketchup bottle-- apologies to the ketchup bottle. Because anyone with one millionth of one percent of an ounce of them would take notice of exactly what Rasu is and is not doing. What IS he doing, Yuna? Looking at you like you’re some kind of a joke. What is he NOT doing? Yanking you into a kiss, tackling you to the bed, or adjusting his pants. You also clearly missed his insinuation that you are so repulsive he'd rather go against his sexuality than have a round with you.
In fact, if you had been paying any attention at all, you would have gotten plenty of evidence that Rasu was nicer than that even before this post. You could have watched any of his interactions with the secretary, for example. There's far more to judging words vs. actions than what is said now vs. what might be done later. Nothing in Rasu's tone or body language has hinted ANYTHING resembling interest. SO KINDLY STOP PITY-WHORING ALREADY.
But then, this lack of attention to 98% of my posts' contents is really par for the course here. Appearance, body language, behavior, and the great bulk of the dialogue are all just flat-out ignored. This post has the first piece of anything resembling introspection for Yuna and it's horribly generic. Every other post only reacts to a few words out of the whole reply, leaving me wondering what she even needs me for. The only piece of my writing that would be needed for this reply is the inclusion of a claim-- any claim of the self at all-- and the words "your boss" somewhere in the dialogue.
Speaking of "your boss," remember back at the beginning when I pointed out that Yuna himself had introspected that Hitachi was in fact his boss and only technically his owner? That boss title clearly only applies when he's thinking it. Rasu isn't allowed to say it because that makes it less angsty.
Yuna's mood is also suffering from whiplash again. Could these reactions be any more artificial? Maybe it's just me, but I would think that to properly dispel wariness, you would first have to POSSESS it. Baring your skin and effectively goading someone to come rape you is not exactly compatible with wariness. In fact, there's nothing in the previous post to give ANY indication that wariness exists. It's all I AM SEXY. I AM ANGSTY. WHY DON'T YOU COME PIN ME TO THE FLOOR ALREADY. Wariness means CAUTION.
And then even THAT goes sailing out the window before the post is over. "Oh, whatever." Aside from being another of those little cues that gives me an image of a spoiled teenage girl and not a young man, that response is dismissive. And let's not overlook what it's dismissing: the contradiction that was pointed out. What a surprise, Yuna evades and ignores the blatant holes in this story just as much as the mun! Or anything he doesn't want to hear, for that matter. The great bulk of Rasu's dialogue might as well not even be there.
Because even now the only thing of any concern is that I have Rasu turn Yuna's angst up to 11. That's all I have to work with now. LOOK AT YUNA. HE'S SEXY. SO SEXY EVERYONE HAS TO RAPE HIM. HINT HINT THAT MEANS YOU HAVE IRRESISTABLE URGES TOO. THERE'S ALWAYS A DIFFERENCE BETWEEN WHAT PEOPLE SAY AND WHAT THEY DO, YOU KNOW. YOU WON'T EVEN BE PUNISHED FOR IT!!
Well, excuse me for having consistency between what I promised OOCly and what I deliver ICly. I can see this isn't a malady from which we both suffer. So sorry for the disappointment, but if it helps at all to know, I'd like to assure you: the feeling is completely mutual.
Part XVIII
Day 2: XI, XII, XIII, XIV, XV, XVI
So we last had Yuna's mun autoing-in ways that Rasu would oppress her character since I was so useless and uncooperative in agreeing to it myself. Because it's not like either of us should value my character being IC or anything. And then, of course, Yuna has to come out to reinforce the stereotype he hates because his logic is SUPPOSED to be confusing ;) and Let Me Show You My Ego in the form of "Look at this sexy body, you know it's sexy and I know you want it even if you're straight I JUST HAVE THAT EFFECT ON PEOPLE. Aren't you lucky for the free peep show?" Yes, that "peep show" that is in truth such a commonplace occurrence where this scene is set that it shouldn't even be a point of observation to either of them.
Hello, cultural slip, I think I can use you.
Izumiz Angel: Rasu made a mental note to check back on the secretary sometime soon and see if she was feeling any better. She seemed nice and Rasu was naturally drawn to try to help people, especially when they were nice. The room really was nice, and reminiscent of a luxurious hotel suite. There was a table with two chairs, a private bathroom, a spacious living area with a sofa and entertainment center, a small kitchenette for making coffee and holding a few snacks, a dresser with a mirror, and a large comfortable bed between two nightstands, each holding a lamp and one holding the phone. A recliner with a lamp sat in the corner. Of course there was also the surveillance system set up to one of the tv channels. The television was situated to be visible from nearly every point in the room.
He was just heading over to the bed to test out its softness when the door slid open. He found the remark quite curious. Really, what was the big deal? It was standard practice to bathe and change clothes amongst one's own gender. He was finding it increasingly difficult to take Yuna too seriously, since he seemed quite set on making snippy remarks, and that was about all he could do in Rasu's opinion. He certainly wasn't worried about Yuna hurting him.
"Are you suggesting you have something to show I've not seen before?" Rasu lifted an eyebrow with a helpless smile.
[redacted]: ( *is giggling* Yep, Yuna's a brat. )
[redacted]: ( I like how Rasu's dealing with him. XD )
I like how you're ignoring the point I made about your continued culture fail XD
[redacted]: Scowling at Rasu, Yuna put his hands on his hips. "That's not the damn point. Didn't anyone tell you what I do here?"
Baring his teeth in a mockery of a grin, Yuna stepped into Rasu's room. "A high-class whore is still a whore, don't you think? You get to have for free what most men pay damn well for."
Walking right up to the other man, Yuna paused when he was just out of reach of Rasu, eyes glaring as he looked up to meet the taller man's gaze. "Tell me, do you like what you see? Hmm?" He reached up to touch his own face lightly, then shrugged his yukata off one shoulder, exposing lighter bruises on his skin there.
"Or maybe you like someone less bruised? It's not like you'd have to ask, anyway, eh?" Taking a half step forward, he lifted his chin and set his jaw, clearly challenging Rasu to do something.
First paragraph. "That's not the damn point. Didn't anyone tell you what I do here?" Authorial inserting much? "The point is YUNA HAS ANGST AND IS ANGSTY FOR IT. Stop muddling the issue with your statements of logic."
Second paragraph. "You get to have for free"-- STOP THERE. So not only does Yuna get to presume that Rasu is gay, he gets to presume that Rasu is SEW TTLY HAWT for him that he'd throw his actual job responsibilities to the wind and take advantage of his charge instead. And boss man is going to be totes cool with him doing EXACTLY WHAT HE WAS HIRED TO KEEP OTHER PEOPLE FROM DOING. This whole premise that Rasu should want to rape Yuna that badly on sheer principle is just skeevy. And as long as we're on that phrase, Yuna was not expected to whore out, remember? By changing this around you have just unraveled the entire premise behind this scene, and the entire reason Rasu had for being there at all. WTG!
Third paragraph. Newsflash: a yukata is not a bathrobe. You cannot just shrug it off the shoulder like that if you've put it on properly.
Fourth paragraph. "IT'S NOT LIKE YOU'D HAVE TO ASK" => "CLEARLY CHALLENGING RASU TO DO SOMETHING." Be a little more subtle, mun. I dare you.
No, seriously. You're just getting desperate now. I haven't had Rasu popping a boner and drooling over Yuna's AMAZING HAWT so you're having him think, speak, (un)dress and act SEX SEX SEX. I haven't had him fall over himself worrying over his POOR LITTLE ANGST-RIDDEN SELF and what has him so MISUNDERSTOOD so you're trying to push that too with "Didn't anyone tell you what I do here? Did you miss that? Ok, try A HIGH CLASS WHORE IS STILL A WHORE. IT ISN'T LIKE YOU'D HAVE TO ASK IF YOU WANTED TO SMEX ME UP." That's the entirety of the content of this post. I AM SEXY AND ANGSTY BECAUSE OF MY SEXINESS. WANT ME, PITY ME, OR GTFO.
...And this too is a complete jump in characterization from the flippant schoolgirl beginning, the ice princess middle and the temperamental hothead ending. Now he's nothing but an obnoxious attention whore trying to sneer his way into Rasu's pants so he can turn around and whine and shriek about how much he doesn't want it.
I had to be really careful with my next post because I didn’t want to make the revulsion of this post’s content obvious, but at the same time, I wanted to call her on the contradictions.
Izumiz Angel: Rasu watched, in an amazingly silent fashion for him, as Yuna stepped in and issued his challenges. The redhead's expression shifted first to confusion, then to incredulity, and then to simple helpless amusement. He laughed weakly, but didn't take a single step back. Yuna didn't intimidate him one bit.
"One, you seem to be forgetting something-- I'm being paid to keep company with you. This isn't my choice; this is my job.... Two, bruised or not bruised, I gotta say... Do you actually think I'm going to take an interest in any kind of peep show you have to offer? You're totally not my type. I'd sooner take the secretary than you!" He laughed a bit-- because really it was meant half as a joke and half as an attempt to put Yuna at ease, since he seemed quite hissy over this idea that he'd be whoring out for free to him.
"And just hold on a second. I thought part of my job was to keep these other guys' hands off you. Now something isn't adding up here. Either you're bullshitting me about just what people are paying damn well for out of you, or your boss was bullshitting me about just what I'm supposed to be doing here. Now which is it?"
[redacted]: ( XD *snickers* )
Oh yes, I'm sure you're just tickled to death that I'm calling out another contradiction ICly-- or maybe you really don't care in the same way you haven't cared from the very beginning. FYI, if the only acknowledgment you give to people's criticisms is to laugh them off, they aren't likely to appreciate being repeatedly dismissed. That's how you end up the subject of multi-part rants like this one. Because let's be honest: if you HAD listened to me any of the numerous times I've tried to say anything, this would not have progressed anywhere close to the point it actually did, which would mean far less material to rant about.
[redacted]: As far as Yuna was concerned, Rasu could claim whatever he wanted, but bitter experience had proven that men said one thing and did another all the time. Straightening his yukata, he took a step back, though he still glared at Rasu somewhat suspiciously. Yuna was annoyed that Rasu seemed to find this amusing, but that didn't dispel his wariness.
"My boss?" Yuna laughed humorlessly, shaking his head at Rasu and giving him an incredulous look. "You don't get it, do you? Oh, whatever." Snorting quietly, he turned away and walked to the sofa, sitting on it gingerly and then turning his attention back to Rasu.
"Just what were you told, anyway?" he asked idly, carefully sitting back and arranging himself into a seemingly casual pose, though he was far from relaxed.
I'm rating Yuna's observational skills as roughly half those of a ketchup bottle-- apologies to the ketchup bottle. Because anyone with one millionth of one percent of an ounce of them would take notice of exactly what Rasu is and is not doing. What IS he doing, Yuna? Looking at you like you’re some kind of a joke. What is he NOT doing? Yanking you into a kiss, tackling you to the bed, or adjusting his pants. You also clearly missed his insinuation that you are so repulsive he'd rather go against his sexuality than have a round with you.
In fact, if you had been paying any attention at all, you would have gotten plenty of evidence that Rasu was nicer than that even before this post. You could have watched any of his interactions with the secretary, for example. There's far more to judging words vs. actions than what is said now vs. what might be done later. Nothing in Rasu's tone or body language has hinted ANYTHING resembling interest. SO KINDLY STOP PITY-WHORING ALREADY.
But then, this lack of attention to 98% of my posts' contents is really par for the course here. Appearance, body language, behavior, and the great bulk of the dialogue are all just flat-out ignored. This post has the first piece of anything resembling introspection for Yuna and it's horribly generic. Every other post only reacts to a few words out of the whole reply, leaving me wondering what she even needs me for. The only piece of my writing that would be needed for this reply is the inclusion of a claim-- any claim of the self at all-- and the words "your boss" somewhere in the dialogue.
Speaking of "your boss," remember back at the beginning when I pointed out that Yuna himself had introspected that Hitachi was in fact his boss and only technically his owner? That boss title clearly only applies when he's thinking it. Rasu isn't allowed to say it because that makes it less angsty.
Yuna's mood is also suffering from whiplash again. Could these reactions be any more artificial? Maybe it's just me, but I would think that to properly dispel wariness, you would first have to POSSESS it. Baring your skin and effectively goading someone to come rape you is not exactly compatible with wariness. In fact, there's nothing in the previous post to give ANY indication that wariness exists. It's all I AM SEXY. I AM ANGSTY. WHY DON'T YOU COME PIN ME TO THE FLOOR ALREADY. Wariness means CAUTION.
And then even THAT goes sailing out the window before the post is over. "Oh, whatever." Aside from being another of those little cues that gives me an image of a spoiled teenage girl and not a young man, that response is dismissive. And let's not overlook what it's dismissing: the contradiction that was pointed out. What a surprise, Yuna evades and ignores the blatant holes in this story just as much as the mun! Or anything he doesn't want to hear, for that matter. The great bulk of Rasu's dialogue might as well not even be there.
Because even now the only thing of any concern is that I have Rasu turn Yuna's angst up to 11. That's all I have to work with now. LOOK AT YUNA. HE'S SEXY. SO SEXY EVERYONE HAS TO RAPE HIM. HINT HINT THAT MEANS YOU HAVE IRRESISTABLE URGES TOO. THERE'S ALWAYS A DIFFERENCE BETWEEN WHAT PEOPLE SAY AND WHAT THEY DO, YOU KNOW. YOU WON'T EVEN BE PUNISHED FOR IT!!
Well, excuse me for having consistency between what I promised OOCly and what I deliver ICly. I can see this isn't a malady from which we both suffer. So sorry for the disappointment, but if it helps at all to know, I'd like to assure you: the feeling is completely mutual.
Part XVIII